Mommy

I wrote this for all the moms including mine :)

Mommy

 

You’re always the shining star,

That would reach us wherever we are.

 

You’ve always been sleepless at night,

Just to see that we’re all sleeping so tight.

 

You carried us so gentle,

And swayed us until we settle.

 

You’ve given us everything that we need,

And it was all in the purest of love indeed.

 

I prayed for you always,

To stand up and keep a straight pace.

 

We’ve gone through hard times,

But there we no serious crimes.

 

You said everything’s gonna be okay,

But saying that won’t cure me in a day.

 

Now I’m sorry for the things that I did,

And I wrote this for you to be with.

 

We love you even the worst of your imperfections,

'Cause a daughter can’t stand alone without your corrections.

Author's Note

tell me what you think.. i know there's a lot of flaws in here somewhere..

Reviews

[Rene Velez]

it's a good poem, nothing really wrong at all, just a little short, poems like this should be a bit longer because people can relate so well to a mothers love, I would have added a bit more personal experiences to draw people in, experiences you alone had with your mom, the warmth of her skin, the beating of heart sleeping on her lap with your head on her chest, stuff like that...small pictures

[Calypso]

I'm glad you write this. She needs all your love.

[Alexis]

Awwww. What a nice, sweet poem for mothers! I hope you show this to your mother! I'm sure she'd like it! Good job. :)

[light and ashes]

I think this is a great poem for mothers :] Wonderful work

[Groovy]

Well expressed poem

[Sunflower 20]

that was beautiful, very well written. i think it could be longer, but its great the way it is :)

[kdpgrahi]

Wow wonderful.

[joshua deathdealer]

This is wonderful!! Full of love for your mother. Beautiful.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Beautifully express! I love my mom with all my heart, just as this poem saids it all.

[TheMizFit]

This very true and very beautiful. I don't think you've got a lot of flaws in here. This is perfect the way it is. :) Great work!

[Kenneth The Poet]

Not really, this is a nice dedication to your mother.