beside me

05/2013

trying to regain ground

I have lain here

longer than I should

soaking up the unfelt warmth

I've let the grass grow up

around and through me

the leaves fall 

weighted with rain

covering my lifeless eyes

helping shut the world away

as time drags it's claws

across our frozen scene

decompose, my love

rot beside me

 

Reviews

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

decompose, my love
rot beside me -- great juxtaposition of the hard and the soft in these lines.

A love poem with a touch of the macabre; a great mixture in my book. My work always tends to slant toward the imagery that touches on an underbelly of sorts, so I can relate to the tone of this one quite well. There is a longing here, and an acceptance of the eventual touch of death, but even in death, love remains so long as two souls are connected strongly enough. Well done...look forward to reading more from you.

[Dye]

There is something hauntingly beautiful about this. Although it sounds like a depressing death, and I read it with more of a sarcastic tone "decompose", and "rot beside me", like wishing ill will against your love. I never interrupt things right but I like what I think and I'm sticking with it. LOL

[joshua deathdealer]

Your right on actually. lol Thx.

[Dye]

That never happens. LOL I'm going to pat myself on the back and call it a day. I've done good. :) Happy to know I read it the way you intended. And I just realized I wrote "interrupt" when I meant "interpret" stupid spell check. :)

[FlatLineBeauty]

This was beautiful and bitter sweet. The thought of death which can for some be gloomy and scary enough, but by the same token not having to die alone. I think dying alone would be the worst thing. I would rather die with the one I love then to have to suffer losing them and go on and live without them. I enjoyed this. Thank your for sharing your talent. :)