few of found

04/2013

...mouths form words 

of concern

I am drowning in the blue

in a liquid symphony

reverberating

in my deadening

they shake me

I'm not coming back

I'm going down 

with the ship

down to the lights 

that shine

through the black

to the ones that 

are calling my name

beckoning me to birth

out of the spider's web

to which I am bound

to position myself 

from the 

many of lost

to the

 

few of found...

Reviews

I think it's so clever and intriguing, how you can describe the perfect drowning here, in all the right details ... I once had a dream of drowning, and woke up choking.... that is the most worse feeling, ever, to dream about... rather I would have one about a gun, or a free fall lol :) your writing is stunning my friend... it has so many depth. Truly wonderful. And connected, to be with "her".

- Elisa

[Neon]

I'm not coming back


I'm going down

with the ship


down to the lights

that shine

through the black

These lines're cool. Well penned write, it's a very powerful write with the great message of love and emotions. Keep on.

[Lydia Shutter]

A "liquid symphony" it can seem that the ocean is playing just that when you walk along the shoreline. A strong message here.....many are lost in this world be it emotionally or morally....few are found. Powerfully emotional write. Lydi**

[lily]

Beautiful poem(: well done

[Quill~]

Lost in the deep blue... I feel this!
Love the "liquid symphony", beautifully written.