to watch you leave

2005

to watch you leave...

is to know such pain, its jagged edges ripping into my facade

as a stake from the garden tears in to warm, dark earth

to watch you leave...

knowing that all the while that never again will I fit myself, warm with sleep

against your back, nor feel you breathing and the beating of your heart

to watch you leave...

aware in every moment of every day that my dreams, my future

once tied with silken ribbons to yours, will never come to be

and the mornings once so silent and hopeful, us gazing at the sky

and so gently awaiting forever are now but a small piece of my past

to watch you leave...

is to know that I've lost my place of existence, my station, my hearts home

that I will wander, forever a nomad, alone and afraid

to watch you leave...

your heart a tight fist of anger and your dry eyes betray nothing of you

I cry for the both of us, my love, because you will not

my troubled dreams watch you leave, over and over again

Reviews

[Dahlia Phoenix]

"to watch you leave" That was breathtaking especially with each stanza increasing the pace as the pain becomes even more unbearable...
Sometimes we have that fear that one day the person we love will walk away harmless but at the same time, why shed tears for an undeserving person like that?
I love the poem and outstanding work.

[Coyote Poetry]

A poem with a sad and powerful story. Mistakes do repeat in dream and in memory. I like how you made the feeling of being alone come alive with strong statements.
'to watch you leave...
is to know that I've lost my place of existence, my station, my hearts home
that I will wander, forever a nomad, alone and afraid"
Thank you for a excellent poem.
Coyote

[Helpless]

to watch you leave...
aware in every moment of every day that my dreams, my future
once tied with silken ribbons to yours, will never come to be
and the mornings once so silent and hopeful, us gazing at the sky

my fav stanza

[clairvoyantmars]

oh my... is this how it feels to watch someone leave?? *sobs* i hate long distance relationships... :((

[Elijah Gleaves]

Saddening stuff here. The third stanza was very moving. Though you never describe the person who is leaving your imagery paints a picture of loneliness and sorrow that is almost palpable.

[Alicia Hirshey]

This is an amazing piece. I love it. Favorited. (as usual)

[Kenneth The Poet]

This is a poignant piece. I love it. I dislike having to leave a person I know and love because I don't know when I will see them again. It brings up memories of childhood for me, even that may not have been the aim of your poem.

Nice work as always.

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

Awe this was really sad...but powerful. You have really great expression in this poem. I liked the imagery too. I think you did a nice job.