highway blues

highway blues

A Poem by joshua deathdealer
"

01/2012

"
I've been here before
continual in my thoughts
I've sat in this very spot
over the lines painted on 
this stretch of highway 
waiting for the long   
streams of blinding light
to come up and over 
the hill, washing over me
followed by the sounds
of engines screaming by 
I could probably reach
out and grab a hold of my
life if I tried or if I 
actually cared, there
are days when the sun
touches my skin and I
feel so alive, I smile 
knowing that there is 
still warmth glowing 
somewhere inside

© 2012 joshua deathdealer


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I like that you've got the NSN music video there because when you listen to it, it really aids in reading the poem. :) And it helps set more of a tone, I guess. Either way, it made me decide that your lack of punctuation is good for the piece, rather than something I initially thought it might have needed. So in that sense, I think the lack of punctuation kind of puts the reader in the atmosphere of the highway, there are moments of pauses where there might be a silence, but there's also the continual verse where it relates to continual thoughts and the cars (and life?) passing by on the highway. I also like the positive ending the poem has, it seems to work as a contrast (or maybe just takes the reader on a new direction?), it has a faith that might have seemed lacking in the beginning. I'm not sure. But this is a lovely poem, and like the setting, it's reflective. :)

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I love how it sounds dark yet hopeful. This poem actually reminded me of The Boulevard of Broken Dreams by Green Day and that's a huge compliment!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like that you've got the NSN music video there because when you listen to it, it really aids in reading the poem. :) And it helps set more of a tone, I guess. Either way, it made me decide that your lack of punctuation is good for the piece, rather than something I initially thought it might have needed. So in that sense, I think the lack of punctuation kind of puts the reader in the atmosphere of the highway, there are moments of pauses where there might be a silence, but there's also the continual verse where it relates to continual thoughts and the cars (and life?) passing by on the highway. I also like the positive ending the poem has, it seems to work as a contrast (or maybe just takes the reader on a new direction?), it has a faith that might have seemed lacking in the beginning. I'm not sure. But this is a lovely poem, and like the setting, it's reflective. :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow deep and interesting, this poem appealed to me and happy I read it with the title itself of "highway blue" and the descriptions that went with it. Wonderful job with the way it flowed and connect it. great imagery and really just some interesting great videos that go with your work; makes me think you really put thought in this stuff. Well done.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like this.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

What a message. Nicely done.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Cool...

Posted 8 Years Ago


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"I could probably reach
out and grab a hold of my
life if I tried or if I
actually cared, there
are days when the sun
touches my skin and I
feel so alive, I smile
knowing that there is
still warmth glowing
somewhere inside"

such lovely words!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Excellent write:-)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A prime example of top-shelf writing. I like what Roarke said, and I tend to take the latter view. I think this poem represents the latter view.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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Casket City, FL



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