you're taking over

My heart does race
with every word you say
I can't keep it an a steady pace

you light up my day
you make me a little more happier
with the words you say

My smile grows
everytime we talk
my love for you really shows

My mind pinpoints you
as a major thing
because to me you are, this is true

All the other thoughts have disappeared
you're taking over my heart soul and mind
this was expected, but not feared

Author's Note

please review this tell me what you like and what I need to work on.

Reviews

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

This is a light and positive piece. Well written, however you must remember to take into accont the reader, it's flows perfectly but make it more memorable if possible. My suggestion would be, and remember it is a mere suggestion, I love your work and mean no offense, I just want to help.

My heart beat does race
with every word that you say
I can't keep it an a steady pace

you light up my day
you make me more happy
with the words you will say

My smile grows
everytime we talk
my love for you really shows

My mind
pinpoints you
as an epic thing
because to me you are, this is true

All the other thoughts have disappeared
you're taking me over
my heart, soul and mind
this was expected, but not feared