My Devil Bhai

My Devil Bhai

A Poem by ayesha gupta
"

dedicated to my little brother

"
He is two-feet shorter,
and eight years younger,
but don't underestimate him by his size,
but he is not an innocent kid,
He is my devil bhai!

Doremon, pokemon,
are his favorites,
he can watch them all the time,
singing the cartoon songs,
don't go on his cute looks,
He is my devil bhai.

Action movies, he loves,
and practise the fights with me, its his passtime.
He hits so hard..ouch! if i deny,
you will find him practising with vases.
He is my action-lover devil bhai.

He makes fun of me,
saying i am fatso,
and never calls me didi.
Most-of-time irritating, but i love him.
He is my lovely devil bhai.

© 2014 ayesha gupta


Author's Note

ayesha gupta
bhai means brother,
and didi means elder sister.
hope you like it. :) rate, review , share.

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=) I had a smile on my face because I was the same in my childhood. Of course I watched different cartoons. Good innocent write.

Posted 9 Years Ago


ayesha gupta

9 Years Ago

thanks for review.. :-)
you wrote is quite well but i feel it needs some editing and revision .hope u consider looking into it once more but the way u have expressed is lovely ..
i could relate this to my brother ,..
so well done
keep writing

Posted 9 Years Ago


ayesha gupta

9 Years Ago

thanks for advice. :)
innocent and adorable.............
a really sweet dedication to your brother.......
i loved it!
:)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Children at this age do not differ the relations close to them and behave rudely with girls, for they are being much loved at home or out of it in comparision to the girl child. They can be naughty at any times while watching their favourite shows or some interesting topic they are getting entertained. They should be made polite by the elder family members with love and care because as time goes on they become more rude than before. I think their behaviour is motivated by these roughly added child programmes.
As for as your poem is concerned it centres round the main character. It would be better if you title your poem "My Devil Brother" because you are addressing the English readers. Some edits and comparisions are needed to make your poem more effective and vibrant...
Thanks for sharing so nice a topic ..
Lol.


Posted 9 Years Ago


ayesha gupta

9 Years Ago

sure sir, i will read them, but it may take time because these days i am busy in filling exam forms .. read more
ayesha gupta

9 Years Ago

sure sir, i will read them, but it may take time because these days i am busy in filling exam forms .. read more
M.A.Rathore

9 Years Ago

Ok..first of all study is must.. Keep it up. Hope for better execution...
nice poem...dedicated to all brothers...nicely penned

Posted 9 Years Ago


ayesha gupta

9 Years Ago

thanks anshul
This is really sweet... Devil bhai's are the ones who love their sisters unconditionally...
I don't have a brother, but a devil bhai seems a lot of fun :-P !!! I really loved it

Posted 9 Years Ago


ayesha gupta

9 Years Ago

thanks for review. :-D
Such a lovely story in the poem. I loved how you displayed the relationship between an elder sister and her younger brother. I do have an elder sister afterall.
And I also appreciated your informal way of writing.
But as a poem, it doesn't quite qualify.
Still, it's a good poem. And I enjoyed reading it. I even look forward to more such poems from you.
Keep writing.
- Your friend.
Peace :-)

Posted 9 Years Ago


ayesha gupta

9 Years Ago

:-) thanks for review
Ankit Mahar

9 Years Ago

You're most welcome
Cute and adorable. Sibling bonds are strange with joined fate even if we do not fit in each other that well but can't help but love each other.

Posted 9 Years Ago


ayesha gupta

9 Years Ago

yes, its true. :-) thanks for review.
I think this is very sweet. Shows a lot of love for your brother.

Posted 9 Years Ago


ayesha gupta

9 Years Ago

thankyou so much.

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Added on November 25, 2014
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ayesha gupta

patna , bihar, patna, India



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