autumn leaves

could we talk for hours 

grab a coffee and you can seduce me with all your minds power 

touch me with your brains knowledge

kiss me with your heart 

grab my body because your polite 

we can be talking all night 

would you like to write a story 

you could be the reason for it   

i want to paint you because your my muse 

i want to love you to

talk to me of the stars you study 

show me how you bad you want me 

could you touch my............heart

could you suck.........all the bad thoughts out of my head 

can you be the new path i take 

or you could be my new mistake 

i wouldn't mind if you touch me

as long as you talk to me for hours 

or do you wanna take a shower 

can i rub your hands when they get cold

is it you i can  hold? 

Reviews

[julia senpai]

thank you guys i will go back and fix my grammar

[Lizardo]

A lovely poem I really like it, and it's very interesting
Good work

[micahd]

interesting poem, I like how she admires his intellect and knowledge. The poem seemed very passionate. If the grammar and spelling were touched u a little (like changing four to for) it would be even better. Good poem though, keep it up.

[kogomai1]

this poem was breathtaking... i was reading it and i got sucked into it.. i love it..
literally the only negative thing i have to say about it is the minor grammar/spelling mistake(s)
other then that it was just perfect

[Laura Lynn]

you fit the rhyme and the meaning together, so what if one wants to say all this, does it mean polite, in some frame of dialect, though sometimes imposing I was informed once by an elder, I don't know what all, madamoiselle