My All

This is a poem that was written during the time of my drug abuse. It shows the grief that I feel for hurting the one I love the most.

MY ALL

Inner battles restraining feelings held within.

Recurring thoughts of memories crawling in my skin.

Looking through closed shades but seeing so much.

Feeling emotions only Jesus can truly touch.

Wanting to close off this horrible world of pain and illusion.

Reasoning leads me to my own inner conclusion.

Communication has become obsolete in this life I live.

Reaching within and knowing I gave all I had to give.

 

Reviews

[Baby Boy]

Wow! This is very very deep and I can feel the pain and emotions coming from your words! Very descriptive write and it catches the reader's ear and touches the reader's heart! Great job gurl! One luv!



-JC-

[Kindra JOY]

Beautiful. This is a battlefield I myself know well and a poem I can personally appreciate.

[James K. Blaylock]

I really love the depths that you're pieces touch upon. You have such a way of showing your readers, your very heart. Be blessed.

jkb

[Kasey Klein]

Hi Jenn.

The first two lines are wonderfully sculpted, carrying different meanings, depending upon where I'd put the commas.

General suggestion:
Feeling emotions (that) only Jesus can truly touch.

We -- meaning most people - tend to drop a that in where it's not needed. Oftentimes, we can delete that, not changing the meaning of the sentence, and make the sentence sharper.

[Shadows of Sight]

How strong in your soul you must have become, by living though and conquering this addiction.
I commend you on that strength
I commend you on the love that you had for others around you to feel this so deeply
you may not have felt brave then, but you are most assuredly brave now.
Wonderful write!

[THE BLACK SEAL]

this is powerful and would do well to be posted in many halfway houses and treatment centers as an ex addicts inner battle. it paints a serene yet tumultous fight. i like it

[Benny Longshank]

Finally... After half an hour of browsing, i've found something with real emotion and (dare I say it!) soul - An account of past experience! Seriously worth reading, and was very refreshing after finding a majority of poems which contained little more than irrelevance and inane tales of apparent 'love'!

Thank you!

Benny