Day 1

A short piece on the importance of the first day when we decide to change for the better.

First day,

Day one thing changed

Changed only for them

Who could see beyond the clouds.

Clouds formed,but,

Where was rain

The rain was in

 Minds as vision walk

Walk that reign

That day and forth

The day we stood

Was day one

Reviews

[Glen Yumang Manese]

A bit confusing of a read in the lines...let me try to interpret the verse:

First day,
Day one thing changed
Changed only for them
Who could see beyond the clouds.

Clouds formed,but,
Where was rain
The rain was in
Minds as vision walk
Walk that reign
That day and forth
The day we stood
Was day one
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First day,
Day one - things changed
Changed only for them
Who could see beyond the clouds?

Clouds formed
Where was the rain
The rain was in minds
As vision walks
Walk that reign
That day and forth
The day we stood
Was day one

That's the best I could get from your words...

[Great Aunt Astri]

I like this poem. I see you use a bit of punctuation. I feel a bit more might make it easier to read..was 'where was rain' a question? I like the last two lines>