Silhouettes

It's been days, but it feels like years
And I've changed my mind again.
The cracks in the walls
remind me of what we said.

Stay alive with one single word
slipping slowly off your tongue.
Falling into this empty room
cramped with what we've become.

Author's Note

Thank you again for reading! If you really enjoyed, you can see more of my extensive writing on my blog! Www.karamarissa.blogspot.com
Best,
Kara M

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"goodbye" feels like the word...to much changing of the mind, uncertainty as to the relationship...but then "commitment" could be the word if we allow ourselves to settle down...

feeling cramped, penned in.--that would be the goodbye...

filling up the empty room...that would be...commitment.

the thought of us, just silhouettes from where we've been.

this is a good example of "less is more"

of leaving so much between the lines that the reader gets to sift through different meanings.

i like poetry that is understated like this.

jacob

[kara_marissa]

I'm so very glad you get my outlook on poetry. I appreciate all threads and reviews I can get. Thank you, Jacob, for reading! Best luck to you!

[Stoic Berserker]

These words are playing a movie back of loves lost and lessons learned. The depth of your words make another stanza completely superfluous.

Thank you for sharing.

[kara_marissa]

Thank you so very much for reading!

[Frieda P]

I own this silhouette...it confines me like a brick wall obstruction in my soul. Love this....I felt it, that's what I love most about poetry. Nicely pen'd.

[kara_marissa]

I couldn't be happier when I read reviews like this, Frieda. I can only wish for people to feel and experience something like I felt when I scribbled it down. Thank you, once again, for your read!

[Frieda P]

You're welcome, that's what it's all about, isn't it? The feeling, the rest are merely incidentals in our writes. My pleasure of course.

[LittleLover]

Since you didn't explain completely what the poem is about, it leaves the mind to wander and ask questions, which I like in poems. It means everyone who reads it will get a different feeling. Short and sweet, yet you somehow got some emotion in there, good job, I like it ^_^
~Best wishes, Sarah
( 100/100 )

[kara_marissa]

Thank you so very much for reading! Best of luck to you as we'll, Sarah!

[Just me]

I really like the last two lines, I think they're brilliant. I tried to visit your blogspot, I just copied and pasted the link but it said:

Sorry, the blog you were looking for does not exist. However, the name kararmarissa is available to register!

[kara_marissa]

Whoops! That's my fault! You'll find everything at karamarissa.blogspot.com! Thank you for reading!