Ocean Dance

Ocean Dance

A Poem by Vanessa Whiteley

 

In the midst of coral ballrooms,

small fish line dance

in flawless synchronisation

as crabs dance the tango

in nippy sidestep,

dramatic as Valentino,

their softer selves

concealed beneath the shell. 

And up above, belles,

tentacles unfolded, attuned

to turning tides, jellyfish

waltz fluid amid the waves.

© 2008 Vanessa Whiteley


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You have produced a gorgeous living snapshot here, well done :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


This is amazing!

However, I would like to know, is the personification? I've been studying personification and I still have no idea what it really is.
I THINK this is personification, but I'm not sure.

Posted 15 Years Ago


hmm this is the music of the universe, how great that you were able to hear it and made us to hear, too.
Loved this!!

Posted 15 Years Ago


well they would do the nippy sidestep...after all...

I don't often use the word often but here it is... darling...as in a darling piece of writing. As in pretty and charming.

This poem acted at a metaphor for me. I saw things of human condition here.



Posted 15 Years Ago


i, too, have been hypnotized by this wonder...like going to church...

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I loved how u explained the fish as dancing I think it is so cute indeed

Posted 15 Years Ago


Beautiful imagery of the world within a world. Your use of dance styles to simulate the typical movements was wonderful. Thank you for sharing.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

can almost hear the music tinkle

Posted 16 Years Ago


This is lovely. I was hooked from line 1, the coral ballrooms, love the nippy crab and well the whole poem is just delightful, I can see the whole scene in my mind's eye, elegant and fun. Almost wanted to break into "I'd like to be under the sea In an octopus's garden in the shade"
Nice to see you back.




Posted 16 Years Ago


I like. Due to a lil buddy of mine, I see 'Finding Nemo' over and over, in fact I saw the stage play at Disney in Florida about a month ago. Your writing is as vivid as any imagery I've seen.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Vanessa Whiteley
Vanessa Whiteley

Bristol, England



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Born in 1560 in Stratford-upon-Avon. I have a passion for writing but my parents wanted me to marry early. I ran away from home to see if I could make my fortune in London as my older brother had d.. more..

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