fairrge foliage

fairrge - gaelic for sea

 

tree-trapped jellyfish, 

tentacles entwined with leaf. 
Exiles of the Earth.   

 

 

Reviews

[James K. Blaylock]

wow,i just loved this line

tree-trapped jellyfish,

another great write.

[Blackbirdsong]

I love the image of "tree-trapped jellyfish"! I would have never thought of that until you wrote it. Now I'm going to remember that everytime I see a spider's web covered with ice like that. Wonderful image in just those three words alone. Then of course "tentacles entwined with leaf," another great image.

I never cease to be amazing at how much imagey can exist in such small poems.

Exquisite writing.

[Kevin Connolly]

The picture makes me itchy, but your words sooth the poetic ear. Excellent, Vanessa.
All that talk of jelly and fish is making me hungry...

[Sandra]

Also very original! - your reference of the web as a tree-trapped jellyfish.
What does fairrge mean? I looked it up and couldn't find the definition.
I'm guessing "exiles of the earth" means that jellyfish belong in the sea and not on earthly soil? Sometimes, we humans can feel a bit exiled.
Nice work!

[Yira Simone]

If I read this correctly, you are saying the remains of the spiders kill are still evident. Also that the spider itself is as painful and deadly as a jellyfish in the water. Nice comparison Vanessa. I loved the last two lines the most...they really created the image of a wasteland of the spiders kills. Good work!-Catrina

[Donald Meikle]

Totally lost on this one Ness. But it could be the rum!
Excellent picture to challenge a poet
count's right I'm just lost

[Cdnsurfer]

Hey Vanessa! "tree-trapped jellyfish" -- very nice imagery with that one! The alliteration is good too with the teh in "tree", "trapped", "ten - "tacles" and "en-twined". Exiles of the Earth -- makes me wonder on that one; it creates a nice pause for reflection. Nice piece. Good luck. Rob

[Poeticpiers]

odd but interesting. terse verse