CryBaby.

Look at me
I'm crying again
mascara scaring my face away
runs down my face
the thick black tears as i seem to cry
you don't care
you don't care what goes on in my life
losing everything that once yours
out of reach just by inches
thinking about the past only makes today harder
but thinking of you only makes me stronger.
one day ill stand up and show you.
that I'm not the little girl i once was..
everything is going the wrong way.
everything is not happening the wrong way.
you don't care
neither do
I've gone through so much pain, tonight.

Reviews

[DailyWyatt]

i am speechless other than the metioned mistakes i cant say anything different than those before me

[AllyKinzz:)]

The line that says "losing everything that once yours" you should put a "once was yours" "You dont care , neither do" you need to put a "I" .

Good piece just fix those little gramatical errors and it will be great!

[KayDennyy!(:]

James && TAylor; Thank you:)
Mike: Im not a little girlll! :/

[Mike Espinosa]

This poem is nice. I like it. There are some grammar and spelling things that broke my concentration for a second. After thinking about it, it seems like they are permissible, since a "little girl" would make those mistakes. So, there is a sense of irony from the speaker. Overall, though, I enjoyed the poem. I liked the emotion and imagery.

[Thomas Fleet]

A very meaningful and emotional poem.
Written well and with thought.
Thanks for sharing. :)

[HappyTaylor]

This is so beautiful and perfect. I love it. It's sad and meaningful.