Please?

Just for me read this; its a really qood one... i hope....

Please
Take my hand when im drowing.
Please.
Give Me breathe when im dying
Please
HEar Me when im screaming.
Please,
Let Me Out, When im drowinnng screaming adn dying.
Please?

Reviews

[Mike Espinosa]

Your structure is very interesting. The change in punctuation and capitalization is also very interesting and gives more sense of character of the speaker. The final "Please?" is a perfect ending. It made me want to yell at the person being addressed to say "Yes." Very well done.

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

I saw the title 'Please' and it brought me here.
What a sad plea .. so heart felt..i like it ,,one little nick the first drowning is missing it's N...very nice,
Peace
Chloe