Hello :)

This is just a little something I wrote about absolute signifigant people in my life, Though I'll have to probably write another because I've got many more!

Hello there!

How are you?

You're good?

Yeah, I'm good too!

 

You're beautiful all the time!

Don't beleive that bratty girl

You are gorgeous beyond compare

You're love brightens my world!

 

And you, I love to pieces

You're amazing, can't be beat!

Everytime I see your face

my cheeks turn red with heat

 

And then you.

You're like a brother to me

I know we're so far away,

But Iove you more then you see

 

And of course, my cousin

the truest blessing in my heart

to me, every aspect to you in perfect

it hurts when we are kept apart!

 

And You. My life

My savior, my world

You've sheilded me from dangers

If life is an oyster, You are the pearl

 

You're love is endless

You're eyes say, "You're free!"

You're guidence is flawless

You're daughter is forever me.

 

 

 

Author's Note

Here are the people I was talking about in this poem :)

1st person(second paragraph): Kura :} (xSamilynnx)
2nd person: Dustin W. :3 (Mr. Cardigan)
3rd person: Dustin F. :D
4th person: Mikayla XD (Mikayla Love)
5th person: Not my dad, but my Father; Jesus Christ <3

The one's in parenthesis are they're Writer's Cafe names if they have one. Check them out!

Reviews

[(ﾉ✪◡✪)ﾉ*:･..]

Your an excellent writer!!! This is a very amazing poem :3

[&#9834;The Girl Next Door&#9834;]

Thank you :)

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No prob :)

[Irene]

the last four stanzas are my life. My Brother Deacon Leo, My cousin Andrew, My loving most wondrous God! great poem

[&#9834;The Girl Next Door&#9834;]

Thank you very much!

[Irene]

hey your welcome

[Michael Bujtas]

It's very upbeat, which I've noticed is hard to successfully do with poetry. Makes me realize there are dozens of ways to say hello for some reason...I liked it though.

[&#9834;The Girl Next Door&#9834;]

Thank you :) It is definitely a challenge, but a happy poem can be accomplished!

[Harley (arbiter)]

Nice tribute. Great rhyming and stuff. :D

[&#9834;The Girl Next Door&#9834;]

Thanks buddy :D

[Harley (arbiter)]

Yeauh

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

Awwh, this is a nice tribute to all of your friends and Jesus Christ. I love reading happy and upbeat poems such as this. I love this! It's great to appreciate your friends and the one that created you. I noticed a couple of spelling errors that aren't too major.

Beleive---*Believe
You're--*Your* (since it's showing possessive form of something) I noticed this mistake in a couple of stanzas.
guidence--Guidance

Other than those mistakes, you done fabulous! :))

Ashley Rivers--Dream BIG and you'll win BIG:)

[&#9834;The Girl Next Door&#9834;]

Thank you so much! I really appreciate it! :D

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

You're welcome, and you deserve it :)

[&#9834;The Girl Next Door&#9834;]

:3 thanks

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

You're welcome again :))

[Steven Cash]

Ooooh I like it

[&#9834;The Girl Next Door&#9834;]

thanks

[Amanda J. S.]

Amazing poem!
I really adore how much you love these people!

[&#9834;The Girl Next Door&#9834;]

Thanks a lot!

[Tomislav Petricevic]

It's nice to read something happy from you! It's a refreshment from the sad poems.
Though I've noticed some grammar mistakes:
beleive - believe
sheilded - shielded
multiple "You're" instead of "Your" in the last stanza

Keep it up, buddy! :)

[&#9834;The Girl Next Door&#9834;]

OOhhhh yeah sorry I'm so bad with grammar! Thanks bestie :D

[Tomislav Petricevic]

lol, don't worry about it, I just thought I'd take the role of the grammar nazi and point it out if nobody else will. XD
Anyways, you're welcome. :D

[&#9834;The Girl Next Door&#9834;]

XD thanks again just for being awesome :P

[Tomislav Petricevic]

Anytime, Kenzie. :D

[afra]

great write ....i enjoyed it ...well done

[&#9834;The Girl Next Door&#9834;]

thanks

[The Analog Kid]

Very nice shout out to your friends and to Jesus. Simply touching .

[&#9834;The Girl Next Door&#9834;]

thanks so much! :D

[The Analog Kid]

YW...keep writing:)

[&#9834;The Girl Next Door&#9834;]

I'll try! :D