Adam

Adam

A Poem by khalid
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what if Adam hadnt eaten the apple?

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In paradise, Adam was so proud
Everything he could taste, only apples, not allowed
But once with Eve, he was walking around
When he heard Satan calling aloud
Hey Adam why are you so coward?
You are very obedient but what is your reward?
Eating from the best tree, you are not allowed!
Come on ! eat it and see how much you will be powered!
You will be immortal in this world
And unfortunately, the same was what Eve added
Adam lifted his hand to the apple and picked
One and started to eat it
Then to earth he was sent
As a punishment
and we still suffer from it
oh Adam! I hope you hadn’t eaten it!

© 2012 khalid


Author's Note

khalid
imagine what if Adam hasnt eaten the apple!

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same difference..regardless of who ate the apple..they would have shared with each other..but truly the real reason Adam is the one who was chosen to be tempted was because women are much more vilified in the bible as they were seen as a lower member of society..

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Adam made some bad choices. Fell to the greed of desire of the apple. Most of us fall to greed and pain. A entertaining poem. Create thoughts. A excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 12 Years Ago


Mmmmm, interesting piece Khalid and thought provoking too... I guess the temptation would have gone on and on until Adam gave in. If it wasn't the apple, then it would have something else.


Posted 12 Years Ago


same difference..regardless of who ate the apple..they would have shared with each other..but truly the real reason Adam is the one who was chosen to be tempted was because women are much more vilified in the bible as they were seen as a lower member of society..

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

hmm such an topic... quite thought-provoking! well, if Adam didn't eat the apple.. humans wouldn't be punished(men wouldn't be punished)... same with Eve...
If she controlled herself... women wouldn't be punished so much... as they are now.. -sigh- But i wonder what world we'd live in though..
If life was paradise... then what would we do?? What would our choices be??
Great write!! I liked the topic.

Posted 12 Years Ago



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