Shimmers of Beauty

I was inspired by a Smashing Pumpkins song, luna. Which this happens to be about the moon and my love for her beauty.

I watch her, she shines just for me
So bright, almost blindingly
The essence of a smile
That lasts for too little a time
I wanna reach up and make her mine
Hidden from me, high up in a cloud
I'll draw her the same, make her proud

The next night, I see her again
Always returning, that's a true friend
She's smiling, that smile illuminates the sky
I'm transfixed by the beauty, don't ask, I don't know why
I go to sleep watching her glow
Why she doesn't stay I'll never be privileged to know
The rays shine upon my body
Making my skin seem to shimmer
I'll never be as bright as her though, she always has a glimmer
I'm in love with you
And if I had a heart to give I would
But to the moon, I shouldn't yet I should
Will I see you again tonight?
Tomorrow, and the days to come soon
I stare in wonder at her beauty, beauty of my moon

Reviews

[Ashley]

its nice, however to me on the first paragraph " the lasts for too little a time " does not make any sense, maybe you can re-word to be time away from us is awhile. or something a little bit more clearer.

[Matthews Reggie]

moon at its best.....