Rehab blues: I killed love

a song

Love was in my face
And I couldn't see
Was black smoke in the air
strangulating my oxygen
ridding my lungs of breath
she was choking me

I needed to live
I needed my life back
I needed to take control
I needed to fight back


It was love or me
It was live or die
She made my choice for me
I couldn't bare to die...

-NO!
I'm not a murderer!
I. am not. a murderer!!
Yes, I killed love!
she was going to kill me!

Ha! Love wasn't a sweet thing!!
She was a cold blooded filth
She'd get you high n swimming
while you die an addictive death!

I just needed to live
just needed my life back
So yes, I killed love
'cause she was going to kill me...

Author's Note

First draft.
Please, I need your opinions. +/-/change/ok?
Love=addiction

Reviews

[Stabitha]

To me, the reason for substituting "addiction" with "love" isn't clear. Without the addendum, I'd find the poem confusing.

Why not actually name the addiction or addictive substance and "kill" it in the poem?

I think addiction is a huge and serious current subject - a poem about the power of addiction and the struggle to break it would be an excellent contribution.

Just my opinion.