Gossip.

A play on poetry I've been reading lately.

Standing solid upon the breaking ground,

I yeild to nature and only her not others,

Branded science leaves me here to die,

Not along with friends or indeed mothers.

 

You've felt the strenght of my loving you,

I beg of you no to listen with eager rate,

Do not turn and feel the stab of eyes,

Really, you don't want to feel my hate.

 

Pleading vomit has been sent to kill me,

I slap at motions not riddled with grit,

No movement of legs controled my mind,

The wind now wisps and holds no hit.

 

Borders are failing when walls come up,

Two men refuse to see eye to thought,

Wisdom has no place for fighting war,

Women lend gossip to those already caught.

Author's Note

Honesty my darlings, honesty!

Reviews

[~FALL3N-ANG3L~]

I like it, its very true Thomas. I enjoyed reading this, it took me a little while to understand the full gist of it. But once I did I was in shock from it, its quite a powerful piece. Great work, get writing, you have quite a talented mystery from you. I like it. It'll take you far, good luck Thomas. (:

[Calypso]

Love? Or anger? I see both things in this poem, but I'm not sure what was the overall impression. I read elements of letting go, but at the same time wanting to hold on. Good job.

[T. Michele Smock]

i like it very much

[Aella.lives]

There were so many lines in here that I loved "Branded science leaves me here to die" was the first and so many to follow.

Gossip is one of the hidden evils in the world. Awesome write!!

[Marie]

A good poem, but you need to go back and find some mistakes. Seeing "eye to thought" is a wonderful phrase.

[patricia]

The wind now wisps and holds no hit. (my favourite line)
i am gonna think on this poem a day or two...i want to understand it better. back soon. Thanks.

[Lowesy]

got it! took a while but slowly my tired brain figured it out...i'm so smart! gossip starts wars, yes? causes people to fight? we don't have long on this earth so enjoy it while we can?
brilliant, you're talented man

[Lowesy]

i didn't understand any of it so it must be good.... two secs, i'll have another read

[Aianarie (INACTIVE)]

Great poem, I love the expressions. "Standing solid upon the breaking ground"...what a great opening line. Sets the tone in an exciting, immediate way. Nice!