WALTZING VANILLA

03 13 13

Fast blood's inquiry
swims in anticipation of a kickstart
from a hand's affirmation of willingness
to be directed to the floor

Will you entertain the modestly-muscled
torch of a nervous arm's appeal
for a waltz around
the swirls of aloof Vanilla?

The shiny pistons of your legs
naked to the thighs
can resuscitate the rust
slumbering unconscious
on Vanilla's engine of
romantic traffic
The intrusions in your neatly-ironed
dress are already being eyed

The aloof shrug of resignation vibrates
in confinement behind Vanilla's
chopping-block chest
like a pulse of introverted torment
Vanilla's pedal has been yearning
for a tempo-treading heel
long enough

Will the segue in the songs of
acquaintance and knowing
cue the needle of your abdomen
to puncture the dividing line of air
between the yet-to-burgeon
chemistry of fused rhythm?

Step into the swirl
and take this waltz
at the end of its wick
like a cigarette
outstretched for ignition
by the cherry tongue of another

Author's Note

Reviews

[kublakhan27]

You just made love with music, I hear you playing guitar or something... and talking in codes through lyrics again :D♫ then it turns out eroticly gorgeous, to what inner desire speaks or sings maybe the most of ;) haha... this was again such a masterpiece of yours. Your brain merge a lot of musings together... :) awesome!

- Elisa

[kublakhan27]

Thank you Elisa, I'm so glad you tapped into it this deeply :) I wish I played something but I've never had the chance to learn anything...piano would probably be my first choice ;P It's funny you mention code too cuz Frieda used the exact same word to describe me yesterday...what can I say, I can't help it :P Thank you again my friend :)

:) Good choice hehe... Ah really? lol, well you talk in codes, sometimes I understand, sometimes, not.. but at least you crack my brain :D just awesome! this was an amazing piece! welcome anytime... (if I have time lol)... xo

[kublakhan27]

Great minds think alike haha ;D xox

That's for sure :D

[kublakhan27]

;D

[KeelyJane]

Love the title and you did a great job with your word selection. I loved the "taste" of this poem. Nice pen friend. :0)

[kublakhan27]

I'm glad you like it, thank you Keely :)

[stephen dillon]

very nice poem i really would love to write longer poems such as this if you have any advice please message me anyway great work

[kublakhan27]

Many thanks, this is the longest one I've written in a while...I never start anything with a particular length in mind, they just tend to come out as they do...patience is probably a big thing with me too though...I find if I have enough patience to sit on something and mull it over for a while, the ideas tend to come out in bunches.

[stephen dillon]

too good of advice ill try

[Pete Langley]

I think your soliloquy waltz could be with a delightful Harley-Davidson or a double Mr. Whippy Vanilla icecream with choc-stick and rasberry sauce, Kube. Enigmatic in the extreme, deliciously phrased and highly enjoyable. Well done, mate.P.

[kublakhan27]

Haha I was hoping for some irony to surface with this one and it looks like it did...an element of rebelliousness has already been detected by some others too...thank you Pete :)

[quinfinn]

i dated this girl in high school. so, how is it possible...well....i never question it anymore. trust me, when they tell you their panties are lined with gold....make your investments. their brains may be modified by society, but they always know where their asses live. move in and reap the whirlwind..... she may not remember you two years from now, but you will be counting your profits by then...ah...women.....can not live without them....

[kublakhan27]

These words are my profits haha If it's any comfort, this was purely a work of imagination and not autobiographical, so your girl is still out there somewhere with gold linings :P Thank you Quin.

[Ufi Auttorri ~ UfoAutho..]

>Q-Q< I wonder, in a former life, did you perhaps own a motorcycle and some dark sunglasses? There should be.. no, scratch that.. Q-tilde-aside - I hear bongos in that waltz, somewhere; and perhaps the rhythmic snapping of fingers amidst the aroma of unfiltered cigarettes and goth-drab double espressos. Then, there's you, under a tiny spot, sitting on a stool on a riser'd stage with a cameo moon backdrop that slowly fades in and out to the cycles of a rotating multi-gel-filtered back light.

This one is a rather strange read for me. But hey, it's you. :) I've gotten so used to being able to peek under the covers that it seems strange when you put one out there without any crib notes.

Gaah! I don't know. I'm under water on this one, khan. {glub, glug}

[kublakhan27]

Haha I have been likened to a Beatnik several times, so I guess a channeling of such entities is par for the course...the one must be entirely me, cuz it's not really me in there ("There's someone in my head but it's not me") I felt like I was giving too much away in the recent past...this feels like a back-to-basics write for me...thank you my friend :)

[Ufi Auttorri ~ UfoAuthor]

no problemo, cool cat... {snap!} ;-)

[Frieda P]

First off, it's anything but Vanilla, and I'll take a whirl...! This is a good glimpse into your changing style of sorts, you tripped the light fandango with this one! People ignite and fuel one another..burn, baby burn. Work it, work it, work it. This one sounded effortless. Love it!

[kublakhan27]

Thank you Frieda :) It's funny you should say those things cuz I felt like this one was a return to form in terms of my voice...the ones I wrote over there didn't sound like me to me (you know what I mean? haha) but this one does...it did get started over there though and it took me three days to finish, including a couple of hours tonight...now that's me ;P

But enough of the technical talk, I finally took a poem dancing ;P Maybe it'll get a grind eventually but first things first...Vanilla could be a person or a state of mind, or both or neither...that's why Vanilla is genderless and referred to in the third person ;) xo

[Frieda P]

Just so you know, you sound like a crazy person trying to explain that, but I know what you mean ;-)

Vanilla is genderless, colorless and can't dance, just like white men. I'm not sure you even know what Vanilla stood for.... ;-P xo

[kublakhan27]

haha I do in fact know what it stands for...but that's just a part of it, if any ;)

[Frieda P]

I love it when you speak in code ;-P

[kublakhan27]

Haha I am code...I know no other way ;P

[Frieda P]

Tell me about it, it'd be easier to decipher Braille most days ;-P

[kublakhan27]

LOL No doubt about that ;P

[Frieda P]

xD