CANDLE LOGIC

10 23 13

Let's apply oblation to our hardships

Obliterate the temptation 

to trip on languid lower lips

imprisoning our stiffer upper lips

Let's apply oblation to our grief

Freeze the imitation waterfalls 

of hot wax sliding through 

the slippery stalagmites

scaling the perimeters of

our duet of melting candles

Let us groom the fire for oblation

like the old Greeks did and

take a flyer on the 

possibility of comfort

Let us take a lesson from

the pond of hot wax 

destined to rebel and drown

the wick before it brands 

lethargy on the local phoenix

Author's Note

I put this together in ten minutes. I don't like posting things I put together in ten minutes, but you know how it is as a writer...there are some things that just have to be said.

Props go out to Frieda for a subtle suggestion that made me like the poem more than I initially did ;) Mind you, "like" is a relative word there...

Reviews

[Frieda P]

Deep sigh here, although I"ve read it already, it's still affecting, not to mention your genius in slapping it together, but the effect from the standpoint of grief. We share this similar pain, and I found the title to make sense in some strange comforting way, 'logic' is there any when it comes to this pain and suffering, only within the rituals and sacrifices we make getting to the point to make it possible to get to that next day, sometimes that next minute in time. You know I 'felt' this one my dear friend. xo

[kublakhan27]

We cope in very similar ways my dear...sadly there have been way too many instances to allow me to come to that conclusion. The title was the first one that sprang to mind when I started thinking about it, and I do think it's sympathetic to the way you've described it. In times like these, we have no choice but to put all our eggs into the basket of tomorrow, and just hope it brings better tidings. I'm sorry you had to relate to this piece naturally, but I'm satisfied in knowing you felt it, as it was really for you to begin with. Thank you Frieda...xo

[Frieda P]

Okay hon, you have finished me off with the music now.... much love my sweet friend. xo

[kublakhan27]

I've said it before, but I hope you're thinking happy thoughts my dear friend...xo

[Sheila Kline]

We have to let that fire burn to purge away the chaff and carry on! We can't burn it at both ends and expect to receive the grace of rebirth and hope in that which is good! Where do we want to leave our brand? We must determine where we are headed when the walk the long road of experience!! The phoenix rises - but where we want it?
Only ten minutes to put your words into form........terrific!!

[kublakhan27]

I could not have said these things more poetically or eloquently as you have here. I'm so glad that this piece resonated so deeply with you. Thank you Shiela :)

[Lydia Shutter]

Sage words here about allowing oneself to feel the pain on the road to healing. The alliteration throughout the write helped the words flow. There is a soft spirituality about your words that was lovely. Lydi**

[kublakhan27]

So glad you felt all of the varying emotions that comprised that piece, thank you Lydia :)

[MsJewel]

Sometimes the very best poems flow quickly - the words are not forced - they just "are"...as with this piece. You have shared some wise words here regarding pain and grief as well as healing. Insightful and intelligently written, I enjoyed this one very much my friend.

:) Julie

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much my friend. Being a personal piece, I'm happy that you were able to tap into the emotions contained within. It's always a joy to hear from you :)

[ms. barrie]

Mr. K. -- very thought provoking write penned here...ten minutes or not,
Loved the imagery and flow your pen blazed upon this write, truly stunning work

Inspiring message you conveyed in this write, for without the hardships, the
Consequences of the choices we make regarding our decisions in life, etc...
They'd be no lessons learned that we all need to be taught.

We should rejoice in learning those lessons (try to never to repeat them) as
Well as celebrating, never taking for granted the good we have in our lives,
Or the memories.

Incredible poem, thanks for sharing :)

[kublakhan27]

So true my friend. If we don't push the boundaries, we'll never know how far we can truly go. I'm so glad you were able to tap into the emotion of this piece...that means a lot when it comes to poems as personal as this one. Thank you Barrie :)

[ms. barrie]

You're very welcome, Steve, I always enjoy, though haha...it's a stretch for my
Brain , to sometimes decipher your cryptic writes.

My heart def felt this one though. As always, my friend this was a pleasure to read.

Pen on and enjoy your Muse, Steve :) - keep warm!

[kublakhan27]

Haha don't worry my friend, sometimes I struggle to decipher myself. I guess that's a sign that I still haven't figured out who I truly am, even after fifteen-plus years of writing from every possible angle I can conjure. But poetry is a language of emotion, and the emotions are really where my best hope lies in connecting with people, and I'm glad you were able to connect to this one. Write on and enjoy your muse as well Barrie :)

[ms. barrie]

I think it's your incredible extensive knowledge of your vocabulary that
You put to amazing use. I've only been writing for 14 years myself, and I
Still do not consider myself a poet..poetry is too structured for my brain

Your writes definitely connect with ppl, don't sell yourself short, Steve!

Yes, myself & my muse needs a lot of discipline : )

Thank you, Steve, Take care & happy writings!

[kublakhan27]

Thank you as always for the encouragement Barrie...you always bring a smile to my face with your notes of inspiration :)

[ms. barrie]

You're very welcome, Steve, as you bring a smile to my
face with the same thing (sorry lack of sleep) :))

Is it snowing there yet? Lol

[kublakhan27]

Haha not yet but it's getting chillier by the day. The colours of Autumn are still present but are beginning to disperse with the increasingly high winds. It's coming haha ;)

[ms. barrie]

Take pics, everything is green here, but it's a bit chilly, for me at least :)

[kublakhan27]

There are some pics from last winter in my profile ;)

[ms. barrie]

Oh I must take a peek, thanks for letting me know! :))

[kublakhan27]

You ought to see my backyard...it really is a winter wonderland ;)

[ms. barrie]

Lucky you, why aren't you making snow angels? Lol ;)

[kublakhan27]

Cuz there's a brook running right through the middle of it haha ;)

[ms. barrie]

Lord that sounds like winter's Elysium! :)

[kublakhan27]

You have to see the pics to get an idea of how it looks...it's hard to explain haha ;P

[ms. barrie]

Checking them out now :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ten minutes often does a poem well...when they pour out like that, there is a naturalness to the content and flow...nothing that feels awkwardly forced...

this is a good offering, an oblation that makes us think about the good and the bad and the reason to believe both need to exist.

love this song also...

well all of credence.

[kublakhan27]

Glad you enjoyed the poem and song, thank you Jacob.

[quixotic_rose]

That's completely wonderful. What are you talking about, just 'like' no one could do less than love the words you have blended so wonderfully together. Of course meaning is significant, but that's only part of the aspect. Bringing together the flow and mix of words within those meanings can be a complex task. Props to you friend! :)

[kublakhan27]

Hey, long time no see :) Your philosophy on poetry basically mirrors mine. A lot of the poetry I like doesn't have any outright or obvious meaning, at least not to me, but it sounds good phonetically. You can see that in my writing too...you only need to read a few pieces to see that I'm a stickler for flow and rhythm haha Glad you enjoyed it my friend :)

[Rita L. Sev]

A baptism of fire will lead to both burns and grace - a candle gives light and warmth, but wears itself out in doing so... your title itself leads to so many thoughts...

There's something to that idea of oblation to our hardships. Like whistling past the graveyard, don't deny that adversity exists, but shine a light to chase the dark...

I like this one, K - there is strength in your words...

[kublakhan27]

I could not have said it better myself. If I could, I might have used that graveyard image, which I hadn't thought of but I like haha So glad that this one spoke to you so deeply, thank you Rita :)

[Rebecca Buller]

A very profound piece, my friend. Many times the words simply flow & we must put them to paper. And, many times, putting those words to paper is cathartic in its own way & aids us through the healing process. There's much to be learned from something so small as a candle. Very well done here:)

[kublakhan27]

Very true on all points my friend. Sometimes a poem just writes itself...it's a rare occurrence for me (hence the note in the comments) but the situation kind of demanded it. Candles are a symbolic thing for me on many levels, some of which I've touched on here. The healing process is long but one has to start somewhere. Thank you Rebecca :)

[Rebecca Buller]

You're very welcome:) Peace!

[Angi]

It doesn't matter how long a poem takes. It only matters that you are able to touch someone with your words. The title of this piece is fantastic. We have to let the hard stuff go. We have to let the pain go. Give it up, pour it out. The candles know it, don't they? Angi~

[kublakhan27]

I suppose we can learn much from the life span of a candle. They are all destined to wither under fire, but they never go without leaving a remnant of their existence. They find a way to survive in their own way. I'm glad that I was able to speak to you with such a personal piece. Thank you Angi.