i exist

i exist by your side
as an invisible entity;
never intruding, never complaining
for i am, a silent observer
a devotee of your beauty.

i exist by an unfathomable union
that connects me to you;
you breathe, and so i breathe
for i am, a recipient of your pain
and a celebrator of your joy.

i exist within the core of you
and you are my only prevailing world
for i am there, inside and always, 
to give you hope, my affectionate company 
If and Only, you want me to.

'i exist', now how true is that?
for i am, just a 'commodity' to you
broken; i am a far-flung, faint voice you never heard
ignored; i'm a silly presence u never desired
nothing that i am, i barely existed to you.

'i exist', i fear its very subtleties now
as someday, i will cease to breathe
and you will feel my absence, deem the lost
for a 'lively commodity' within you has died
alas, you will die inside too.

Reviews

[Vicky Zhuang Yi-Yin]

Wow, this is a very deep poem. I really like this write a lot. I also like the repetition of "I exist". The only problem is that words that need to be capitalized are not, but maybe that's your choice, so I won't be bothering with the grammatical reviews. But other than that, I really like this, and I'm glad that I came across this. Good job and good writings!
-Yin