A Hope in the Mind

A Hope in the Mind

A Poem by lindsay

Call us idealists,
because we do not follow in the lane.
You are to quick to judge,
since we do not play your game.

We follow our heart,instead of prosperity.
Which leads you think,we live in our dreams,
listen to-you won't the wishes we carry.

You say we live in falseness,
a place that just can not be
watch the world around you
but you will not see.
For you posse one point of view
the opposite of we;
who will transcend foward
all that we hope and know-
without bearing even a sword.

We are transcendalists,
anarchists-
libertarians-
socialists-
the "politically unacceppeted"-
the sqaures in this round world,
the lost piece to the ruined puzzle.

An intricate role we have to play
yet we are ignored
thrown out of the way.
Together we are strong at heart
with a will like no other
scoff at this world
and the lies that smother,
the people within
as if having different opinions is a sin.

What they do not realise, however
what they are really living in,
is sprialing downward and the outlook is dim.
We on the other hand,
we must be wrong
after all to you
we do not even belong amongst you all-
who are bred to know only success
and terrified to fall.

Us,we are the misfits.
The lost and forgotten.
The gum on your shoe.
The cuts up you arm.
The scab that won't heal.
The fear that triggers the alarm.


The future is ours;
it is our chance to shine
Together we fall.
Together we rise.

© 2009 lindsay


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This romps along like a voice in the wilderness, clearly saying what you think and feel. It's a courageous write and I so approve of that!

'We follow our heart,instead of prosperity- ~~~ which leads you think,we live in our dreams ~~~ listen to-you won't the wishes we carry.'

Long live those hearts!

However, please, please, please take more care in editing your writing: there are too many spelling errors and misplaced punctuation which sometimes spoils the flow of your work. That's such a pity because you have the heart of a lion and fine talent.

Thanks for sharing.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Absolutely love this. The way it flows is so effortless and driving, rousing and empowering.

Posted 2 Years Ago


I loved this... a poem for the true outsiders and outcasts in the world. Who are "they" to say what is right or wrong? Excellent work!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This romps along like a voice in the wilderness, clearly saying what you think and feel. It's a courageous write and I so approve of that!

'We follow our heart,instead of prosperity- ~~~ which leads you think,we live in our dreams ~~~ listen to-you won't the wishes we carry.'

Long live those hearts!

However, please, please, please take more care in editing your writing: there are too many spelling errors and misplaced punctuation which sometimes spoils the flow of your work. That's such a pity because you have the heart of a lion and fine talent.

Thanks for sharing.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Really enjoyed this Lindsay.
My favourite part is

'Us,we are the misfits
the lost and forgotten.
The gum on your shoe
The cuts up you arm
the scab that won't heal
the fear that triggers the alarm'

A lot of passion comes through this piece. Great flow too.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Beautiful, well written. I invisioned much from this read. I could relate to this poem on many different levels and I think It will reach out to a variety of age groups even though it is quite intelligently written. I very much enjoyed this poem and living in California it makes me think about how screwed up our local government is and how they look down on those who they say they are actually trying to help.
Well done. Thank you.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A very political speech, a break free of bonds and a representation of teh strength in numbers I realy
liekd this piece of work

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This poem shares a few similarities with the writer's other submission to my Group, in terms of the theme. When I read the first verse, I remembered that it's important to distinguish between individualism and idealism. The words have quite different meanings, although I'm sure that the writer knows this. Indeed, it is often us as individuals, who actually formulate new ideals. Also, to adapt existing ideals, when (and if) it is appropriate. What do the rest of you think?

The final verse is quite subtle, because it really has a dual meaning. It both reminds the reader, that the future is up to us, and the importance of staying united. After all, even individuals can find shared points of view. Thus, we can unite about a single idea (for example), despite not agreeing about other matters. Of course, we need to establish sufficient mutual trust - before this could become a reality.

Verse four mentions various political beliefs, but each of these is rather different. There are also some minor spelling errors in this verse (and in verse three). More importantly, perhaps, the writer has also emphassied how those of us who still have dreams (or hopes) that we can make the future much better, are often regarded as outcasts by society as a whole. Or, that we belong in a certain category (regardless of the truth).

The writer uses emotive words, such as "misfits", "the lost and forgotten", to suggest how idealists tend to be ignored or shunned by society. What do the rest of you think, my fellow Group members? Also, is this a new problem, or one has has always been prevalent human societies?

Thankyou kindly, lindsay! For adding this to my Group, "Twilight's Disciples"! Who will be next, to add their writing? Could it be you, perhaps?

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This was a powerful read. Their is truthfulness in your words. We are the future, I'm glad you take notice of the small things and you have a great heart. Nicely done.

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 11 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

a very very strong poem . its message stark at times and very blunt . you are our hope . our future , everything we will be depends so much on you . so please dream beautiful dreams and make them come true .

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 11 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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