Pegs

Pegs

A Poem by Alana McGuire
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Harley suggested I write a poem about a legless albino porcupine....So I did!

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There once lived an albino porcupine by the name of Pegs.
Pegs had no friends; Pegs had white legs.
Pegs lived all alone in a den by the seashore.
She never played with others; she was quite the bore.
But little did they know, by daylight, Pegs sharpened her quills.
At nighttime she shot them at rabbits for thrills.
Into her den, she dragged the dead beasts.
Gnawing from flesh to the bone, she had such lovely feasts.
The blood from the rabbits began to stain her white fur.
She then noticed it was now far from pure.
Deep inside, maniacal thoughts began to stir..
While playing a game of solo chess,
Peg began to crave the bloody taste of flesh.
She peaked outside, but saw no rabbits for miles.
In the corner of her den were only stripped bone piles.
She gnawed upon a few until she felt a sharp pain.
It grew stronger and stronger and made her insane.
She then woke up from her awful nightmare,
and realized she had eaten her own legs; flesh, bone, and hair.
Pegs was distraught at the bloody mess that she saw.
She started to scream, then she started to bawl.
No one came running to comfort Pegs.
For Pegs had no friends, and now Pegs had no legs.

© 2012 Alana McGuire


Author's Note

Alana McGuire
This isn't meant to be anything serious. I just wrote it upon request for kicks and giggles. :)

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This was akin to a nursery rhyme, where it is presented with a lighthearted nature, but has a rather dark undertone. Maybe undertone isn't the right word, because the macabre descriptions are pretty clear. What gets me is that I thought this was going to be a cute story, but then you turn the tables when Pegs starts murdering rabbits. What I find most disturbing is that Pegs eats the rabbits, when porcupines are primarily herbivores, which may or may not have led to her insanity at the end, when she starts eating her own legs. That being said, I enjoyed this piece very much. It was dark, surprising, and though I wouldn't say it was funny, it was humorous because of it's presentation. I also can't way I felt any pity for Pegs at the end there. She was obviously a sociopath (in my interpretation).

Posted 11 Years Ago


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I loved it. Kinda funny, kinda like fairy tale sort of to me.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Brilliant, the humor and creepiness work well together

Posted 11 Years Ago


So creepy yet has a funny, quirky charm at the same time. Maniacally adorable!

Posted 11 Years Ago


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Brilliantly grim! - Reminds me of Tim Burton's work xD

Love it all, except maybe the use of 'freaked out' - it just doesn't feel right in the context.

Posted 11 Years Ago


I thought this was going to be so adorable. But this was really good in the other way, the scary way. It's like a horror story meets childrens book. It's really good!

Posted 11 Years Ago


whoa, that was grim haha. well done!

Posted 11 Years Ago


haha, this is silly and kind of horrifying at the same time.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Okay firstly before reading this poem, when I saw it in my RR, i was thinking; oh a request from Alana finally :) I have really missed her great writes. Then I saw the picture... cute but made me even more interested to see what you had written this time.

After reading the poem; my review to you is; this seems like a fun poem you have written as a request. This is really fun, it made me smile and giggle, such a different animal to write about too, and the name you gave it with the little imaginative story in the poem. This does seem like a different write from you, but it is nice and I did enjoy it and like it a lot. The ending is sad for the cute little porcupine. I did enjoy the rhyming as well, sort of like the rhyming from kids books. Nice write... enjoyed, liked, different.

Posted 11 Years Ago


And I'm glad I suggested it!

Posted 11 Years Ago



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Tags: legless, white, albino, porcupine, blood, gore, bones, rabbit, gnaw, peg, funny, humor, quills

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