Reflection of Moments

Words depicting times. I won't say more than that.

I touched your skin, broken

and watched as you turned away

weren't we supposed to be Heaven?

my green eyes cast in matte grey

fingers tingle incisions

I'm lost in this maze

you pulled back your decisions 

I attacked your famed gaze

uttered words bearing pitchforks

countered curse i create

to you I am nothing

to me I'm a game

so quick is your gamble

let loose volleys of chains

I am but poisoned

I am your slave.

Author's Note

Just something I had to get out...

Reviews

[Dana Alsamsam]

"I touched your skin, broken
and watched as you turned away
weren't we supposed to be Heaven?
my green eyes cast in matte grey"

these lines gave me chills. great line breaks, great imagery. i feel your pain and relate to this completely. it speaks well to heartbreak and the disillusionment of a perfect relationship. keep writing out your pain!

[LapseOfMind]

Thank you much. This poem wrote itself as I sat alone in this damned hotel. Emotions needing to vacate...

[Dana Alsamsam]

something about it makes me want to bring you some wine and hold you just so that you have arms around you...in the least creepy way possible. loneliness is riveting and often romantic in our poetry but it hurts like hell.

[LapseOfMind]

I stepped away from writing for a while but recently decided to come back, so I've been looking through old poetry and stories. Coming across this comment, I noticed my lack of appreciation, at least in the sense that I didn't offer you a 'thank you' for your final comment. Wine and arms would most definitely have been welcome on that night, and others...

[Dana Alsamsam]

oh no worries at all, I have stepped much further into writing but sort of away from this website... I feel as if I'm abandoning people, but it is better this way. I hope your loneliness has subsided a bit at least.

[Cool Handless Luke]

let it flow bro! Probably means more to you than anyone who will read but that's the way all poetry is when you get right down to it. I can feel the anger and frustration and a deep questioning of love. Perhaps unrequited or at least the absence of touch and emotion has led you to wonder. Very emotional piece and a powerful message. Thanks for sharing it!

[LapseOfMind]

Thanks for reading it man. It was just some leftover memories of stuff that I wanted to get rid of. I tossed it into the words and let it go, gone, bye bye. Feels good to let it go

[Cool Handless Luke]

absolutely. if poets didn't have those things in their heads then we would have nothing to write about!