Ships

Ships

A Poem by Pretty_as_a_Poet
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Two Men, same Drink

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You can fight a Plague,

A penny for a life to save,

You can slip away,

A thousand for a getaway,

You can rearrange,

Fire, Water, Fung Shui,

You can stay the same,

Or you can leave the birdcage,

Two men at a bar,

One man drives a fast car,

Another has a beater,

And it’ll never take him very far,


And both men have the same scars:

Two men, same drink,

Two men, same dream,

Two men, same gleam,


One man is married,

One has a lover on the side,

One is entertaining,

And one just wants to get by,

Both of them are happy

both are broken inside,


It's funny when you say it,

But perfection is the greatest lie,

You never can obtain it,

But everybody still tries,

We all want to be famous,

Always reaching for the sky,


The Poor Man is nameless,

The Rich wishes his was never known,

Both men would love to trade it,

But the silver lining’s at home.

No matter what your aim is,

Everybody falls short,


And both men have the same scars:

Two men, same drink,

Two men, same dream,

Two men, same gleam,


And happiness is hidden,

Maybe a rainbow in a storm,

Or the moon beneath the clouds,

And apple pie that’s still warm,

The little things are faded,

So that you hardly can see,

The rich man says: “I hate to say this”,

“But wouldn’t you rather be like me?”


The poor says: “I guess it’s true,

Saying I’d rather be like you,

But I think it’s safe to say,

That you’d rather be me too,”

that’s kind of messed up, ‘aint it?

looking over to the other side,

Where the grass is always sunlit,

But your neighbour's porch is cockeyed,


And both men have the same scars:

Two men, same drink,

Two men, same dream,

Two men, same gleam,


Same sorrow: two classes

Happy home; Happy masses,

Big smiles, bad actors


Two days till the drought passes,

Last call, downed like swallowed pride

Two ships in the night, plastered,

Dreaming of the other side


© 2018 Pretty_as_a_Poet


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......mesmerizing!! It starts off clunky in musicality, and some of the rhymes feel forced, but the overall result is stupendous. It has a "All Along the Watchtower" feel to it with a little J Alfred Prufrock for some added spice. Those refrains are absolutely brilliant, and they come at the right time, and the ending is simply wow!! There's a je-ne-sais-quoi feeling I'm getting that's saying there could be more to it - some minor tweaking just to get the musicality flowing better - but it could simply be me. BUT, I do have to call you on the F-bomb! Because your poetry is sooooo good, planting this "bomb" blows everything to smithereens. Because that's what bombs do! It's all pretty and beautiful, then the swear ruins it all, because it doesn't really fit in as well as you might think it does. And because it only appears once, it's amplifies the jarring factor by 100%, given it definitely shows it doesn't have to be there. Yes, you could justify its presence by the fact that it's common bar rat language, but it ruins the solemnity that the poem creates throughout its entirety. GET - IT - OUT - OF THERE!! Other than that, brilliant! Tweak the clunkiness at the beginning, and this would be a genuine gem!! Well freaking done!

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

emipoemi

6 Months Ago

Did you do a thorough edit of this? For I just read it again, and it reads tremendously better!!
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......mesmerizing!! It starts off clunky in musicality, and some of the rhymes feel forced, but the overall result is stupendous. It has a "All Along the Watchtower" feel to it with a little J Alfred Prufrock for some added spice. Those refrains are absolutely brilliant, and they come at the right time, and the ending is simply wow!! There's a je-ne-sais-quoi feeling I'm getting that's saying there could be more to it - some minor tweaking just to get the musicality flowing better - but it could simply be me. BUT, I do have to call you on the F-bomb! Because your poetry is sooooo good, planting this "bomb" blows everything to smithereens. Because that's what bombs do! It's all pretty and beautiful, then the swear ruins it all, because it doesn't really fit in as well as you might think it does. And because it only appears once, it's amplifies the jarring factor by 100%, given it definitely shows it doesn't have to be there. Yes, you could justify its presence by the fact that it's common bar rat language, but it ruins the solemnity that the poem creates throughout its entirety. GET - IT - OUT - OF THERE!! Other than that, brilliant! Tweak the clunkiness at the beginning, and this would be a genuine gem!! Well freaking done!

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

emipoemi

6 Months Ago

Did you do a thorough edit of this? For I just read it again, and it reads tremendously better!!
read more

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Tags: Depression, Anxiety, Sadness, Hardship, Hope, Inspiration, otherside, dreams, rich, Memories, Fun Times, Hard Times, Good Times, Bad Times, Friends, Lovers, Passion, Mask, Hiding

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