A Forgotten Moment

It started out

As a hidden

Giggle

But then

I felt it

Rise

Rumbling

From my belly

To my chest

Climbing

Up my throat

Burning gloriously

All the way

And it came out

As a belting

Roar

And it continued

And it spread

Through all the

People

Who didn’t care

What was funny

And we sat there

Drunk

On our

Youth

Reveling

In being so

Lost

In our own worlds

But still so

Together

In our quest

For purpose

And yet able

To forget all that

Just

For a moment

And share our

Lonely splendor

Until our throats

Were laughed

Raw

And our stomachs hurt

In a good way

Author's Note

-I don't really like the name
-I don't like the word "giggle" but I don't know what other word to use
-There are parts which kind of contradict each other... but I also think that's very representative of the mood I'm trying to produce (you know, those confused teenage years, etc)
-This turned out way deeper than I originally intended. I actually almost just made the entire poem:
It was so good to laugh
Until our stomachs hurt
In a good way

Reviews

[PadfootBlack]

DAMN girl. I love this. Consider changing giggle to "chortle". ;) I really love this poem. "And it spread
Through all the
People
Who didn’t care
What was funny
And we sat there
Drunk
On our
Youth
Reveling
In being so
Lost
In our own worlds"
this is my favorite section.

[Liefje]

Thanks :) That's my favorite part too, I think. Although I'm also rather fond of the end: "And share our/Lonely splendor/Until our throats/Were laughed/Raw/And our stomachs hurt/In a good way"
I did consider "chortle" but it's just too obscure a word-it's almost comical, and that's not the mood I'm going for there. I want it to be more subtle and gentle. Giggle will have to do unless I want to entirely change the whole first section into a metaphor or something, which I don't. It's fine.

[Zap-the-awesome]

Twas good

[Liefje]

Why thank you :)

[Just Another Writer]

I like giggle. Because chortle seems like a bigger laugh and giggles are small and your poem is about it growing into something hilariously uncontrollable. I can relate to this! AWESOME job! :D

[Liefje]

Thanks so much

[Liefje]

!

[Liefje]

oops I forgot the ! in my first comment

[Just Another Writer]

XD you go girl.