Don't Bother Saying Goodbye

this poem was wrote for a friend who acted like i wasn't even alive anymore after he meet someone one time and if it wasn't for me they would have never known each other.

Don't bother saying goodbye

you were something i never thought you would be

a friend i could depend on till the end.

well the end is here

and you're not near 

you're so close, yet so far away.

sometimes you make me fell as though i've been replaced 

by someone who barely knew you

so when i leave and don't come back

don't bother to say goodbye.

Reviews

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

goodbye is a word when the heart dont mean
bye bye is a childish way to quit when you want to win
and denying you your due is just so wrong when you know the premier league u r in

[Sami Khalil]

Sorry for the loss if you are and a good poem...:)

[Alexis Markum]

thank you and thank you again

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[XxAmandaxX]

This is a heart warming poem ! I give you 100 because...I love it!

[Alexis Markum]

thank you. this poem was wrote for my friend who betrayed me and replaced me when i was always there for him.

[XxAmandaxX]

Ohh i'--HIM! How dare he do that to you! You know SOMETIMES(sorry if i had to shout :P) boys are rude and selfish! Oh yeah sorry for your friend betrayal :(

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

I like the sentiment of this piece. You have all the elements, just needs a little polishing up. I would suggest using a little more personal description and imagery to make this have more impact for the reader, because what you have to say is truly important. The feeling of being "replaced" with "someone who barely knew" the person you loved is one that is extremely painful, and I can relate. No one is replaceable, though we often feel that way.

Technical issues:
Some grammatical things "your so close" should be "you're" or "you are" so close, same thing in the line above "your not near" should be "you are" or "you're" not near.

Otherwise, an intriguing read. I like where this is going, just needs a little more depth and clarity.

[DeletedAccount156]

This was a heart felt poem and I'm so sorry to hear that this happened! I know the feeling you portrayed in this poem and hope that you can look forward and not let him hold you back!