The Shadows of my Mind

A little spooky

In the tight stringent alleyways of my mind

dark deep pockets lie

 

Creeping the shadows crawl upon my very wall

 

Enclosed within my chest

heart beats thud against my breast

 

Dilated pupils stare

as ghostly spectrals glare

 

Turn Turn Turn

as panic strikes deep

Run Run Run

 

Screaming i awake, sweating from my sleep

 

Panting, chest heaving

I notice

the Shadows crafty grin

vanishing from my wall.

Reviews

[Sunny Skye]

Creepy but very good. Good Job!

-SkyeBlanco-

[Cynthia]

yes, thats spooky and a bit of scary, I love the imagery inside your story, it have created a great show in my head. Its a very good poem, I love the staza
'Turn Turn Turn
as panic strikes deep
Run Run Run'
Very Nice Written.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Great imagerys, and very spooky indeed!

[Ladysue]

oh yes spooky. The last verse my favorite...good images..nicely done...

[xjust-for-me.x]

a bit eeire but supenseful..like it very much.

[Hush Hush]

Wow that's a really psychological poem, very eerie. O_o

[Marie Harrison]

Perhaps they were stroking your sweaty brow as you slept or giving you an icy kiss as you dreamed. Chilling haunt of a write!

[Esoteric Strand]

Fairly straightforward. I thought the final stanza was, by far, the best. A fading ghostly grin is a nice final image.

Regards,

E

[OT]

very nice!! you flit between images, like the rhyme scheme alternates and jumps!! well written, and a little spooky indeed!!

[Jūdan FyreHeart]

You brought out a variety of reactions and emotions while describing something so dark. The sense of morbid curiosity, to discover more of the darkness within knowing it's so taboo and 'wrong' yet we can't help but push sometimes. On the other hand it terrifies us to consider what twisted thoughts our mind will wreak upon us.