Depression

It's a poem-short story

Once upon a time

A young boy heard a knocking door

Dropping his clouds and toys, the boy opened the door

Before he could realize who it was

Hell entered his soul and burned everything there ever was

Scared that hell could lock him away 

He lock himself in a cave

Where darkness was his only friend

Where silence was the only trend

Hell looked for the boy everywhere it went

It knew that the boy wouldn't last long without

Love

The boy got tired of being sad in the cave

Where he had to only fade

So he left the lonely place

Praying to God for wisdom and pace 

He dropped to his knees and ate from bread

Hell saw the boy walking in the twilight 

It's flames devoured stone and water that night

It wanted the boy badly

It wanted to be feared not be loved 

So he flew through it flames 

Like a whirlpool of darkness and space

God answered the boy in dreams

The boy didn't feel scare anymore 

He felt happy

He felt loved 

God told the boy to not fear

But also to not be feared 

He shouldn't be afraid of Isolation and facts

Because they are just toys from the human mind

The boy happy for his answered 

Finally, the boy got what was taken from him

A happiness flooded his face

Yet it wasn't over 

'Cause hell came rampaging with flames

Burning everything that was in place 

But this time 

Hell could not make the boy fall before him

As much sadness as hell tried to flood the boy's mind

The boy could not be taken down to his knees

Because he had reason to live for now 

God ordered hell to sleep in a cage

Where it could never do harm again  

Author's Note

I think this one is a pretty decent one, but it tells the story on how I was running from depression but how I confronted it with happy thoughts and God, and it's fading away.
Defeat darkness with Daylight.

Reviews

[mia2014]

This is brilliant! I thought, since you checked out my writing... Ages ago now, I might as well check out yours. I've been depressed before and this is an excellent way of describing how scary it feels and what it can be like... I really like the ending as well. Although to say that having depression is a pain in the a*s for the person that has it would be a complete and utter understatement, once I eventually dealt with all my problems holding me back from happiness the first time round and got through it, it's made it so much easier for me now in a way, further down the line, because now if my negative thoughts or emotions ever threaten to overwhelm me, it's just like I know my self better now and I know best how to stop them/ weaken them before they get too much. I feel like you really captured all of that in this poem. Very good job.

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such is the power of faith....once you have it, and can hold on to it, it can conquer the worst demons...unless it's chemical issues, then some meds are required...nicely-written, Lizardo

[Lizardo]

Thank you so much Ledrew! I really appreciate your thoughts on this one

[Terrence Chang]

The start need some improvement in writing in overall. In a sense, needs a finishing touch according to me for e.g instead of

Once upon a time
A young boy heard a knocking door
Dropping his clouds and toys, the boy opened the door

You could try

A tale of a boy
Who hears a door being knocked
Raising in fear as he drops his tears
Shivering hands, holding his toys

This is what I think. I hope you don't get me wrong or be offended by my thought

[Lizardo]

Oh no don't worry :) but I like it just how it is
Thanks for your thoughts though, I always like good and helping comments :) thanks Terrence!

[closed]

and we battle on
the constant war of the mind

this piece captures the very essence of one of the artist's greatest internal conflicts



-Dream

[Lizardo]

Thank you so much Dream, I really appreciate it

[Perkele.7885]

It is a strange thing about Gods love. God want no other God's of any kind before Him and He wants to be sure of it. I cannot blame Him for that. We his children have dismayed Him many times before. Now, God knows. But, He wants us to know as well so, He does what He does does in God's time!

[Lizardo]

That is true Perkele, God knows what he does, therefore we just need trust him.