Clockwork Heart

Clockwork Heart

A Poem by Valley
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How it feels to have autism

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I look up from my pen and paper

The alphabet in alignment

Perfect calligraphy

But still I feel

Something is missing

Something that makes words important

 

Perhaps it has to do with beating

The beating of others’ hearts

While mine simply

Ticks and whirs

The gears in all the right places

© 2015 Valley


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This poem has a very deep and hidden meaning in it....I really liked this poem....And i liked the first para more than the second one .........actually first para made me to read this whole poem...I am again giving you the same advice try it at least ones...try to rhyme your poem...do you know your poem has excellent idea , powerful words but if it would have been rhyming it would be even more interesting....Do you know tea , you are having milk(nice ideas) , tea leaves(powerful words)...but what is lacking is sugar(rhyming words)....which makes the tea tasty ...just imagine tea without sugar...same is the condition here....But the trial was nice...it is said try , try , but don't cry...Try again a new poem...any rhyming scheme which you find comfortable like abab , aabb...any rhyming scheme...but try it at least once...you will yoursef notice your poem becoming even more beautiful....i hope you will satisfy this hungry writer's hunger by writing even more nice poem...
Never leave writing...
Keep on writing and thanks for sharing...
Take care...
Riddhi

Posted 8 Years Ago



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Added on November 6, 2015
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Valley
Valley

Los Angeles, CA



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I'm merely average but people grasp at the memory of the prodigy third grader that knew what an Oxford comma was. more..

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