God's Will

My heart is broken

For ten long years

I don't understand

Why you're not here

You left me here all alone

And never said a word

I miss you like Hell

And find no peace on earth

Why did you leave?

Did you not love me anymore?

I've searched for the answers

And even knocked on Heavens door

I miss you so much

And feel like I can't be whole

I live with a broken heart

And one empty soul

I can't wait to see you again

But I know that I must

Life is so unfair

Your death so unjust

I miss you dad

And I know I always will

There's nothing I can do

I guess it's just God's Will

Author's Note

This poem was written for my father who passed away 10 years ago this November

Reviews

[Thomas C]

I've written this review twice, but only half of it shows up each time, so, instead, I will just send you a message.

[Thomas C]

Hello. Stevo requested I read this poem. Honestly, I am not qualified to critique poetry. I've never been into poetry, except for the poetry I was forced to read in high school.

It is a sad poem. My father passed away in 2002 and my mother in 2000, so I understand the sadness.

There are a few punctuation mistakes. They are noted below:

And find no peace on earth

[Anna]

Very heartfelt and beautiful. Because you left the father part till the end, it draws in everybody in some way. Heart break and agony is something everyone experiences from one point to the next and is very relatable.The last stanza though not everyone can relate to it personally, really pulls on your heart strings. Good job, very emotional

[RainDancer1997]

This is really beautiful and emotional. Very touching and yet heartbreaking. Very good job:)!!

[Aristede Craig Jr]

Beautiful rememberance love.... Sometimes we are reminded why we do the things we do.... And we regain the strength to move on... Through the ugly world they can be beauty in love there is beauty in love hold on

[Baby Ricochet]

Life is neither fair or unfair and horrible things happen to ordinary people. Good poem

[Michael Stevens]

Beautiful tribute to your dad!

[Eddie Phillips]

You blew me away with this poem. There is a true feeling of loss but also a ending feeling of resolve. Pain will pass but the memory remains. Thank you for sharing this for those who have lost someone

[eatme]

The first 4 lines have superior pacing, perhaps as the most worked.
From there, the rhythm loses me.

Why did you leave? (is back to the pace)
Did you not love me anymore? [Did you love no more]
I've searched for the answers [I searched for answers]
And even knocked on Heavens door [and knocked heavens door]

I especially like the first four lines. the structure of it.

[Saumya]

i can completely relate with all your thoughts here..
its a huge irony of life, that we lose or rather, only those people are he first to leave, whom we love the most....i can feel the degree of love, and the huge feeling of pain you r having on losing your very precious dad..
i too had the same when i lost my verry dear grannny....
i think God does so, because he too is unhappy in his world, and wants good people to be with him

but always remember my friend, if God puts us in trouble, he's the only one who helps us to come out of it:)
and time heals all wounds with its passage
i hope and really wish you soon get well...

a very well expressed write
well done:)