Gemini

Gemini

A Poem by Carlos Lorenzo Estrada
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An homage to Brothers Grimm stories told in a poem.

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Gemini

By

Carlos Lorenzo Estrada 


(Tarot)  

Once upon a time
so very long ago

Death courted sisters
In tale little know

He came upon a garden 
where two girls often dance

Sibling beauties both unique 
despite their mirrored glance

Beneath the stars of universe
in grass of shimmering green

They laughed and played most joyfully
In meadow so serene 

Enchanted by their glamour 
intrigued by their caprice

He sat and watched them silently 
for their frolic brought him peace

Yet in Grim Reaper's heart reveals 
no nihilist is Death

A simple dreamer who yearns for life
this seeker of our breath




© 2023 Carlos Lorenzo Estrada


Author's Note

Carlos Lorenzo Estrada
Feel free to comment and leave your thoughts. Thank you for stopping by.. CLE

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Enjoyed zgenini
if death claims one would one survives?
gemini are twins they say two minided double trouble but what are their strength is their weakness? looking forward to the end and how it starts again

Posted 1 Year Ago


Carlos Lorenzo Estrada

1 Year Ago

Thank you kindly for sharing your thoughts with me on this poem. I really appreciate it.
The predator lurks. Perhaps death is a reluctant angel. Loves life, yet can't help but take it. You put tarot in your title. The original use of tarot cards was a game poets would play in the 13th century. I'm wondering what your meaning or reference is?

Posted 1 Year Ago


Carlos Lorenzo Estrada

1 Year Ago

Whenever I write I at times come up with an original title or word that may have inspired the piece... read more
"A simple dreamer who yearns for life
this seeker of our breath"

Posted 1 Year Ago


"Death courted sisters
In tale little know"


Posted 1 Year Ago


I felt the power and grim aspect of this reaper: millions fear the outcome but some wait with assurance in their hearts. I like how you tell the story and the ending. You give us a taste of the future to come: lose not hope though.
Excellent and unique work.
Note: Line 4(should it be known)???

Posted 1 Year Ago


Carlos Lorenzo Estrada

1 Year Ago

Yes it should be known, but for rhyming purposes I had to shorten it hehe. Thank you kindly for your.. read more
Sami Khalil

1 Year Ago

All true and well said. Thank you for sharing your wisdom. You are welcome sir.
Now the Brothers Grimm, I remember well from tender years. Dark tales that often left me wide eyed and scared. I somehow can’t imagine Grim Reaper in your poem to be a simple dreamer who yearns for life. No he is a sinister character up to no good:) I enjoyed the read Carlos.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Carlos Lorenzo Estrada

1 Year Ago

I love some of the brothers Grimm tales. Have always had a fascination with the macabre. I started .. read more
Chris Shaw

1 Year Ago

Now there’s a thought, what if death was seductive and alluring :) I can only picture death as the.. read more
Carlos Lorenzo Estrada

1 Year Ago

You too my poet friend. Thank you so much again. CLE
I enjoyed the read, my friend. Death is the great imposter of endings but the universe wastes nothing. Keep up the wonderful writing. F.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Carlos Lorenzo Estrada

1 Year Ago

Thank you Fabian I so appreciate the encouragement, especially from an artistic poet whose work I e.. read more
Fabian G. Franklin

1 Year Ago

It's a pleasure to hang out with you, Carlos. You're always upbeat and friendly. My kind of people. .. read more
Good rhyming, Carlos. I especially like rhyming couplets. Well, of course, death has gotten some bad pr over the centuries, and I admit to bias. Really hard to see the GR as "a simple dreamer who yearns for life." Even if it is true, the sucker shouldn't gorge himself so.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Carlos Lorenzo Estrada

1 Year Ago

lol you are winning me over with your argument. I mean honestly it is difficult imagining death loo.. read more
It's been so long since I read Grimm's fairy tales, so I don't remember which stories are theirs, but I do remember that a lot of fairy tale literature is quite dark. Like who entertains kids by telling a story of children entering a candy house only to be encountered by a woman who wants to eat them, and ultimately the children escape by murdering her.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Carlos Lorenzo Estrada

1 Year Ago

I have always gravitated towards such dark writings. The first two writers I read were H.P Lovecraft.. read more
I found this quite interesting; besides being sweet and tender, the twins must have had has some competitiveness between them; Usually identical twins have unique personalities and there is some marking on them to be able to tell them apart; I know of one set of twins that are laterally stuck together, meaning that they dress alike and once can't be without the other. ' definitely a union....I love the way you composed this tale, your usual excellent wordage.
Best, B

Posted 1 Year Ago


Carlos Lorenzo Estrada

1 Year Ago

Thank you B and you are correct about identical twins. As much as they look similar there are diffe.. read more
Betty Hermelee

1 Year Ago

Thanks for your explanation! Don’t remember Grim’s tales, but I don’t think they were happy on.. read more

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