Fictional Love Part II

The night we built a giant fort

Out of childhood sheets

In the living room of my apartment

Laid pillows and blankets on the floor

And spent the entire night watching

Horribly good movies like Teen Witch

And starship troopers, is the night

I knew you would be in my life forever

Of my life with you, because lets

Be honest, once you build a fort

Together you are forever floating

In the moat with that person

 

That night you made me pinky swear

I would never write a poem about you

Honey it’s been two years these

Words can no longer be locked

In the dungeon of your insecurity and doubt

They need to breathe fresh air

Broadcast megaphone to the world

And I know a pinky swear

Is the most sacred promise a boy can make

But you have made me a man

And promises don’t carry over

 

We are not perfect the arguments we have had

Always end in me sleeping on the couch

Because somehow you are always right

And I am always horribly wrong

Maybe one day my need for attention combined

With your ability to flirt with absolutely anyone

Will melt the ice caps, the sea levels will rise

Flooding cities and we will be responsible

For the apocalypse, I’m confusing as heaven

And life with me is never easy

I’ll probably never had it all figured out

 

When we traveled to my hometown

You watched memories of

My brothers and I wrestling in the living room

When my mother pulled pictures

From the closet of me as a child

I could see the storm clouds

Forming in your pupil

I knew I was in love with you

And wanted nothing more

Than you beside me

It doesn’t matter where we live

Because when I am with you

I am home, if I had a nickel

For every person that told me

We would never last

I would have jars full

Enough to buy us that house

With the picket fence

And the children running

Through the sprinkler

 

You are the best thing

To happen to my life

Since the day I was born

Because you make me better

Make me want to be better

Make me want to do better

But I would be lying if I said

We will be together till

The end of days

But we would be damned

If we didn’t try

Basically, what I want to ask is

Will you marry me?

Author's Note

This is a new poem, not sure if I like it but thought I would put it out there.

Reviews

[Mazie Tackett]

awh so adorable

[Cole Hayley]

Im not really one for love poems, but you did a good job here tweekeing it to make that cherry pie, white picket fence feel. I like it, its a great piece.

[Serenity Faith]

Oh...my....god....absolutely brilliant, no better, probably the best damn love poem I've ever read! If you wrote this to me asking for my hand the answer would not be yes...it would be HELL YES! Reminded me almost word for word of my husband and I(even though I know it's different in your case xD). I've never been good at writing love poems, that's where his talent lies...Trying to write a love poem to him is like trying to write a prayer for all the hate in the world. I've just got too much love, not easily expressed or able to fit on paper it seems xD You've got a great talent. A part three, hopefully?

[Lucas Jay]

wow, thank you so much! There may be a part three and a part four, maybe even a part 5, who knows at this point!

[Serenity Faith]

Woooot! I most definitely look forward to it xD

[Serenity Faith]

Teehee can't say its fiction now though, sure you don't have a hidden camera in my Love's parents' house? Gah! 8 truly can't wait to show him this. This really touched home for me, I mean seriously just great, sending a read request to a few of my friends xD

[Lucas Jay]

Wow, thank you so much!

[afra]

awwww this is so sweet and cute .....good job

[Lucas Jay]

thanks!

[Lost in Wonderland]

Wow. That was so sweet and well written! Just...:) you are a great poet and I don't know who that special person in your life is, or if this is merely a work of fiction, but after they read this they will want you to write them a poem every day

[Lost in Wonderland]

Wait!!! I just read the title again! So it is fiction! Okwell it was so beautifully written that I forgot it was fiction:) well done!
God bless

[Lucas Jay]

thanks!

[Lost in Wonderland]

No prob