"why do you take such long showers?"

"why do you take such long showers?"

A Poem by Sophie
"

its been a while, hi guys. ive changed a bit.

"
i think that maybe
the hot water
could scorch the sadness out of my skin
until it is raw and red
but emptied of your touch

and that maybe
the soap will soak into my bones
and break the hold you had in me,
snap the hope i had in you

but when i step out
and my soul drips onto the bathmat
the air is as cold
as you were

© 2013 Sophie


Author's Note

Sophie
hi.
tell me what you think?
i havent written a poem in months

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A amazing poem. Direct and honest thoughts is the best poetry. Hard to erase sadness. Would be nice to become clean of pain and sadness with a long shower. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Touching, Could Feel My Time of Love That din Go well. Very well described. Do write More i would love to read ur work.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Relatable and real! It seemed very honest and like a glimpse into somebody else's reality.

Posted 6 Years Ago


I love it! All i would change is, "the hold you had on me" instead of in me. But otherwise a great pice that feels real and sort of private. Thanks for sharing!

Posted 6 Years Ago


Wow! Very well penned Sophie...i really liked it...the parallels you draw here...especially..."the air is as cold as you were"
the pain...the sadness...the eagerness to erase...all so vividly expressed...
keep it up!

regards
Barricade

Posted 6 Years Ago


A amazing poem. Direct and honest thoughts is the best poetry. Hard to erase sadness. Would be nice to become clean of pain and sadness with a long shower. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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