The Forest Girl

We tamed the wild girl.

She misses the days she spent in the trees,

Soaking up rays on the canopy.

She misses the feel of the balmy breeze,

As the notes of her song were set free.

Each second used to flutter away,

The wind would carry the words she’d say,

Nothing was fixed, nor was it astray,

Alive in the trees and the song she’d play.

But the trees are gone, and she’s subdued.

We turned her hard-working and shrewd. 

We found her home, we did obtrude,

We tore it down and she fell, all but nude.

We pitied her, when we were the pitiful.

We cleaned her up, made her beautiful.

Sent her to school, turned her cynical. 

And now she’s just another girl, forgettable. 

Author's Note

I feel bad that I haven't been on this website in so long.
I will be returning all reviews from now on, because I miss reading people's writing.

Anyway, I hope you enjoyed. Please let me know what you think of it. Should I add another stanza explaining what happened, or is it already clear?

Luna xx :)

Reviews

[Wolven]

It seems kind of clear already. I wrote a poem similar to this, but it was more around a character from the 'legend of Zelda' franchise. I should probably publish it here.
ugh, tangents. This is beautifully written Luna. I love the language you used to show how she misses being amongst the trees. 'balmy' was a word i found very striking. People don't often use it, but its amazing here.
I love poems like these, because rather than expressing some generic emotion continually, the emotion has been expressed in the form of a story, which i think is a true art in itself, being able to write two things at once in a way... Does that make sense?

if it doesn't, then it should. I also like the way you've incorporated music as a theme here, as it really adds a third dimension to it in my opinion. I can imagine a sort of ancient gaelic air being sung amongst the trees thanks to it, which is awesome.

A truly beautiful poem, Luna. Glad you're back. I think you should Write more of this kind of poetry, cuz' it is absolutely amazing. :)

[luna11]

Thank you so much, I'm glad you like it :)

[Sami Khalil]

Some things are good wild and free and some things are good to be tamed. Here I take it you are with the first school of thought. A wonderful write...:)............

[luna11]

Thank you for reviewing, and yes I'm with the first school of thought:)

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. Good to know...You are welcome...:)..............................