Drama

Drama

She calls to say hi,

And he calls her stupid.

Hateful wails 

Of unwanted feelings 

So intense you’d think they were waves of an icy sea.

The sunlight peaks, 

And so does the violence,

But as I watch, 

I see the beauty of it all.

So maybe I’m the one who’s intense.

Reviews

[J Todd Underhill]

Like the read, I couldn't resist after reading your bio, as for dinner, well maybe I shall have you cook it for us if you are a cook? Actually I am just up the road in Denver and should you wanna come read your works aloud at the open mic I host you are always welcome, and who knows maybe I would BBQ for you!

[Muse]

It's easy...after a fight...to feel the guilt. Sometimes looking back I wonder if I added drama to what should have been a petty subject matter. No metaphors here...you spell it all out. The mystery between the sexes never ceases to amaze me.

[Babe Roxx]

Wow, a really deep read invoked in such a few lines...I had a co-worker, who I once worked with...very beautiful, yet she would get beat by her man...I would have to listen to her tell her problems to me on a daily basis like I was her psychologist or something...anyhoo, I told her why put up with it...she said, "I Love him." It just boggled my mind but I never said anything further like leave him, it was their business and I knew getting too involved would be crazy...she just needed to vent, eventually, she divorced him but took a couple of years and she lost her house and had to look for new housing with her 2 kids....the good ending to this story is, she did find someone else that loved her for her...and had a kid with him. Don't ever stay in an abusive relationship...I've seen it batter the soul, where they withered to emptiness.

[Archia]

The last line has so much impact, because it's different I think, well not different, but an opposite; well not really an opposite, but it's something, a really good something. 'The sunlight peaks, /And so does the violence' I adore those two lines, just the contrasts of sunlight and violence, it's amazing. There's so much depth in this, though it's not like this is particularly long.