In Troubled Waters

A simple spiritual

 

I'm sticking my eyes in the water

Bless the Lord

Sticking my eyes in the water

Halleu

 

I have eyes O my soul

but my eyes don't want to see

I'm sticking my eyes in troubled water

Praise our God

 

I'm sticking my ears in the water

Bless the Lord

Sticking my ears in the water

Halleu

 

I have ears O my soul

but my ears don't want to hear

I'm sticking my ears in troubled water

Praise our God

 

I'm sticking my hands in the water

Bless the Lord

Sticking my hands in the water

Halleu

 

I have hands O my soul

but my hands don't want to touch

I'm sticking my hands in troubled water

Praise our God

 

 

My eyes don't want to see, can't see

My ears don't want to hear, don't hear

I can't touch anyone, no one

I will find my life in troubled waters

Praise our God

Author's Note

My soul felt to write a spiritual. I'm sure it's a work in progress so please tell me what you think.

Reviews

[Bennett Logan]

I like this a lot... Ther's just something clean and refreshing about spirituals, and you captured that here. The only suggestions I would make all concern punctuation, but this works well.

[Antony]

It is said that we should praise God when we are in our worse hour, not only when he helps us, but when he doesn't hear as well, this is very good Mary, that is how I interpret this spiritual writing.
Blue Moon

[Prose-full]

OUTSTADING..i love it..
"'m sticking my eyes in the water
Bless the Lord
Sticking my eyes in the water
Halleu"....got me right from start..grabbed me, i should say..
it's a 10 Mary

[Alma]

I like the opposites that you describe here. I love the way you write 'don't want', it is very powerful and describes some kind of aversion to the God- given senses. It's like the spirit in the human body, the purity coming to touch the filth. Very, very well- written.


Love,
Alma

[Jessica]

I'm not religious. Far from it. I'll admit, I do believe in some sort of higher power and such, but I have my reasons for not believing in the figure that lots of people refer to as "God". But, that being said, I really liked this. I really like your last stanza, cause it's perfect. Perfect to me anyways. This world we live in is far from perfect, it's hard to simply exist in this place without fighting for our souls. Steller writing darling.