I am a cloud

Your whispers warm me so....

I felt you
Lying next to me
Singing sweet whispers
touching my soul

Your sweet kiss
nourishing the very
core of my existence.

I am a boy floating
in an eternal
sea drifting endlessly
lost without you

Being change into a man
by your touch feeling
the pureness that
you offer me.

I am a cloud
in your sky.
Who will sometimes
turn the light
into shadows

But I am forever yours.

Author's Note

inspired by Lily Mae's "softly in the night"

http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/Lily-Mae/725963/

Reviews

[icelandicblue]

I enjoyed reading the gentle cadence of this poem. However, the most striking stanzas were the ones in which you speak of transformation:

I was a boy floating
in an eternal
sea drifting endlessly
lost without you.

Dreaming of you
dancing in a crystal
clear blue sky
while riding the waves
of self loathing.

Gaining insight into
life and love
changing into a man
with your gentle touch
feeling
the pureness that
you offer.

The juxtaposition of images is really effective and they cement the reader's attention. It's highly emotive and has all the trappings of a romantic poem.

[Raven Moonchild]

This poem is amazing and beautiful. :)

[Matthew Kult]

Thank you very much

[VALORMORE DE PLUME]

Pretty impressive for the profile of darkness. I'm glad you can expound on the light as well. This is a great song of the heart. thank you for sharing it here.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

a rather sensuous cloud without dandruff, ( just kidding) but really this is very nice writing

[Mockingbird]

i didn't think you had it in you....these words would definitely sweep me off my feet...

[CBH]

If someone wrote a poem like this and gave it to me, I would be in love. Really great work. One day, when I am more experienced than now, I want to be able to write poetry as deep and crafted as your work, Matthew.

[Vanessa Pavelock]

I enjoyed seeing how this extended metaphor enfolded throughout the poem. Lovely piece!

[AWickedMoon]

What a loving poem. :)