Plucked Petals

She'd dropped the petals one by one, wishing in a hopeful plead.
He loves me, he loves me not, he loves me...?

 

As the last fell, she'd smiled at the beauty scattered at her feet.

He loves me!

 

He'd kissed her in the dim light, and those three words she chose to believe.

He loves me...

 

But now she lays as the petals on the floor.

Just the same, they'd been used as what little they'd been wanted for,

Then cast aside, still all too accurate to the metaphor.

As the silent tears fall, in her mind lives only one terrible thought:

He loves me not.

Reviews

[Persona]

Wow! So good! I loved the layout - story like rather than in a poem's format! It was so sorrowful after beginning as a cute, childish story. I like that it developed and we were shown the girl's true emotions. Your last verse, oh so flowery. That's my thing in poems!
100!

[Serenity Faith]

Just...just...wOw....I could feel the brimming happiness and then the draining sadness from the poem. A very vivid picture came to mind upon reading it as well. Amazingly done, and had such a nice flow.

[Cole Hayley]

An amazing read. The contest was hard to decide all around, but when I read this poem I knew it was the winner. Really great on all boards, I loved it. Great job.

[Drowning with Stars]

Thank you so much! :)

[Owlgirl]

An exquisitly written emotional poem, in the first line of the last stanza the wording is a bit tricky and you may want to change it to "But now as she lays the petals on the floor" but that is an authors choice :) Nice flow and great word choices. Exceptional poetry.

deep and wonderful

[just is]

I loved the last stanza, this is wonderful.

[Archia]

Oh that's so sad. A wonderful metaphor there, sad though. I loved the idea of the petals. "He loves me not." A great way to end.

[Suditi]

Amazing poem.
It has such depth and one can actually visualize the entire situation.
It strikes a chord instantly.

[Marie]

Oh...that's too bad. Petals and tears falling, meaning two different things.

[DepthWriter]

Short, sweet, direct, and filled with depth! :)