Drowning

Just a figurative poem I wrote> Enjoy!

 

Drowning

 

I knew I shouldn’t have stayed up late yesterday.

 

My eyelids feel like twin blocks of lead.

Tiredness courses through my veins.

Fatigue grips me from below

And tries to pull me under.

 

Feels like I’m drowning

As I struggle to keep my eyes open

I struggle to stay afloat

Can’t fall asleep

Or the shark will get me

 

And for a brief moment

I go under.

I resurface but I know I can’t last much longer.

I go under again.

As my eyes open again

I resurface for the last time.

And the cold, freezing water claims me...

And the shark moves in to kill...

“One more time you fall asleep in class, you are so going to detention!”

Reviews

[Geralyn Miller]

The only solace is falling asleep in class is safer than falling asleep while driving.
As a chronic insomniac, I have experienced many times like you depict. You use marvelous imagery to explain the feeling in a dramatic way.

[Holly]

wow, I got some anxiety from this one and couldn't finish. It was like I was there and gona be eaten! good job yay!

I ought to sleep more, but I never do. Too stubborn. You've described the feeling quite well, and I must say: I wasn't expecting the ending.