My loneliness

In the mid of loneliness; given by my love for who I spread my life in their feet as a red carpet, for who I turned my aims, for who I dedicated my dreams, for who I devoted my prayers; I was finding hope even it would as little as a gravel. The little drops out of the eyes dripping and wetting face made me felt more lonely thinking about who was responsible for my loneliness, for my tears and was there anyone who could give me little hope or happiness. While in the search of these questions I felt trembling condition of my brain and the body. I decided to lay down and to start meditating on these questions until I found correct answers. With the time lots of answers came into my mind and passed marking them incorrect but continued with strong aim of finding answers. Now my eyes were tired after ejecting uncountable water, I wanted to close them and I did so, but I still continued thinking. I didn’t remember for how long I remained in that state of anxiety and when I slept. Next day; I found nothing is mine, my love, my eyes, and my mind.

Reviews

[Muhammad Qasim]

Written nicely .. Had to read the ending twice to understand .. that all aside .. the starting is awesome and the flow really good!! akhri line rewrite kri .. samjni parti hai dimag lgakr .. till when my mind worked and when it also left my thoughts alone until they died.

[Muhammad Ibraheem]

check it now

[Muhammad Qasim]

Ahem ahem .. Ab its awesome!!

[Muhammad Ibraheem]

thnks :)

[jacob clark]

I love the realization. Excellent ending.

[Muhammad Ibraheem]

thanks :)

[Hamza]

have you tried smiling in such a condition ?
if not give it a try if you go into that state again ... and you'll see everything is, but, yours .. as it used to be ..
:)

[Muhammad Ibraheem]

i tried to smile but that is impossible because there are million reasons which stops me to get out of this condition

[Hamza]

then that smile would be called --> one in a million ..
and you don't want to miss it, do you ? :)

[Muhammad Ibraheem]

no i don't want to miss it in the front of the people :)

[Muhammad Ibraheem]

i am used to of laughing and smile in the front of others even they hurt me, so that they can not get a way to my dark and lonely heart

[The dark story]

that's a beautiful piece of writing.the emotions were so strong.and touching too........
it's true that when someone loves a person with true devotion.and when thier hearts break.for them it seems that their world has come to an end.brilliant writing.Great Work!!!!!11

[Muhammad Ibraheem]

yeah
and often words don't explain the intensity of your feelings

[Muhammad Ibraheem]

thanks for liking it :)

[The dark story]

your welcome:)

[Muhammad Ibraheem]

Don't mention

[InsanityWriter]

I love the way you write it. :) It's so beautiful and powerful, I could really feel the emotion. Keep writing!! ^_^ 100/100

[Muhammad Ibraheem]

thank you so much :)