Desolate Bones

Desolate Bones

A Poem by BrokenWingedPhoenix

Wind-swept willows despondently twisting,

Swirling and waiting; into darkness anticipating.

Watery veins distending transversely,

Against tarnished war-torn windows; shells escalating.

Eagerly peering…extending…into the great Divide. 

Ever belligerent, dampened of spirit,

Fighting the torrents of glaring brilliant light.

Howling in the distance, enter the gale-force lamb,

The nocturnal embrace of a nation’s demise is at hand. 

© 2015 BrokenWingedPhoenix


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So I read your poem, then I read the comments posted about your poem. Does anyone know what you are trying to say in the poem? Or care really? Tell me what you were trying to convey in this poem. Tell me your thoughts when you wrote it. I do like the Emily Dickinson feel to it. That is one thing I think I can say about this poem. I liked your word choice I just don't have a clear view of what you are trying to convey. Maybe it is too advanced for me or something I don't know. I just feel like poetry should be clear to anyone who reads it. Don't take this as a negative comment, I just want to be straight and honest with you.

Posted 9 Years Ago


BrokenWingedPhoenix

9 Years Ago

Hello. When I write poetry, I write from the heart and try to write something that everyone can rela.. read more
J3ssInJupit3r

9 Years Ago

okay I definitely see that now. I just like to know what the writer was trying to convey so that I c.. read more
BrokenWingedPhoenix

9 Years Ago

No worries. We are all individuals and that's what makes life interesting. :)
wonderful.... great words and passion.... well done

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

BrokenWingedPhoenix

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much.
Nice writing, I like it Good job

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

BrokenWingedPhoenix

9 Years Ago

Thank you, I appreciate that.
nicely written work...good imagination

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

BrokenWingedPhoenix

9 Years Ago

Thank you, I appreciate that. :)

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Added on October 14, 2015
Last Updated on October 14, 2015
Tags: Death, Society, War, Sorrow

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I'm a Browncoat, a Whovian, an animal advocate, a voice for the ones that cannot speak, a friend of the environment, and a warrior woman. As far as hobbies go, I write poetry, short stories and I pain.. more..

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