An escape

She sits in the shower...

 with the water running over her head

As the hot water runs down the drain

Slowly she loses her will power

Feeling the fear creep in her bed

Beginning to question "Am I sane?"

 

She doesn't understand

 Why do these dark thoughts choose to stay, to haunt ...

Why ?

Isn't life supposed to be grand?..

But no instead...life is cruel, as it begins it's hourly taunt

All she thinks about is death and yet... she doesn't wish to die

The darkness just creeps in

Choosing to leave only un-answered questions in her mind

Breaking what is left of the girl she use to know

Slowly closing her eyes, being positive about what the morning will bring

As she sleeps her teeth begin to grind

Waking up with a cold sweet realizing there is nowhere to go...

Nowhere to run, nowhere to turn...

 after all how do you escape your own mind?

Reviews

[AprilRN1210]

that is the kicker isn't it?.. you cannot escape the demons and prison of your mind.. you have to conquer it, and make it the sanctuary it once was.. not so easy... you have done a good job of expressing the torment, the pain, the resignation.. and the realization.. your writing continues to improve.. nice job!...

few small things I noticed..

***not sure if "willpower" should be one word here, or you meant to be two...

***"(it's)--doesn't need an apostrophe here...

***("Breaking what is left of the girl she use(d) to know".).... past tense right?

[micky]

Good to here from you April thank you for the review I am so glad you liked the piece

[Tara Togoland]

How else could you have made this better? You are so gifted as a writer. High five!

[Eleanor]

True this is!
You can escape other people but no one has been able to escape from their own demons and negative thoughts.
Nice job! :)

[micky]

Thanks so much :)

[Malister Mikey]

escaping oneself is something no one can do, unless they just cut off their emotions completely.
I hate the way my mind is and races so bad, death is a common thing that I think about, whether it is my death or others and how will I deal with it or how will they cope when I'm gone.
I really liked this poem and it brings to mind things I can relate to which make it that much better, it's flow is good and was a worthy read.

Sincerely, Malister Mikey

[micky]

Thank you soooo much Mikey I am so glad you like this piece :)

[Malister Mikey]

You're welcome

[cschear87]

I love it! It evokes so much pain and emotion. I think we have all felt something like this and for you to put that into words is hard and beautiful at the same time. I love the writing and really feel like I got inside her head.

[micky]

Thank you so much I am so glad that you enjoyed my poem :)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

wow!!! scary!!!
the is no escaping one's own mind!
perfect end!
beautifully written!!
amazing poem!!
i loved it!!
:)

[micky]

Thank you so much. I have been a little rusty lately