We Vagabonds

We wander long, We vagabonds

in dream begotten tales.

Such trails as weave like filigree upon

this earthly sphere. Tread misty vales

whilst softly working free these surly bonds.

Coursing through dark and storm-crowned sails,

we reach out for a cloudy breach

towards a red and rising sun.

Reviews

[Ruth]

I like the change of pace here:)
Absorbed into a strange world! Awesome work! xx

[Miss Coral]

The first sentence pulled me in, but then the flow and rhyming totally changed. While still a very good piece, I think that the structure could be changed around a bit, and it would be a wonderful piece. Beautiful imagery.

Good job. :)

[deeps]

This is very beuatiful, I like this write.

[Gabrielle Ash]

Thoroughly impressed. Great images. thanks for the lovely poem.

[Dana Kathryn]

I like it,its very interesting and has a beautiful flow :)

[AtticusBlack]

I love that! "Such trails as weave like filigree upon this earthly sphere". Such an amazing simile. Great poem all round to be honest, I'm impressed.

[LeeLee Ryder]

Love the luscious imagery...
The last line is killer..
LLR

[The Wave]

nice
really enjoyed reading this

overall, its short but a very strong piece. i do feel the flow is a tad inconsistent about midway through... but you used words for not only people to read but to feel...
good job

[Civiana]

The grammar and layout are perfect.
No errors in punctuation or spelling...

To be honest, the content is goos if it falls upon poetic eyes but to the average person the content may be hard to follow.

Poetry doesn't always have to have a point or moral, but usually should consist of a general, clear theme. I believe you have a theme but it may be a bit too vaguely put.

[No.]

I decided to read this because I lovee Vagabond by Wolfmother, and then I realized it was actually a word that I should look up.

And I love this. The rhythm is excellent, the language itself is beautiful, it's like... a real poem. It's great. Great.