sense portrait. 3/28/13

sense portrait. 3/28/13

mikl paul

 

a flutter of wrist       and what is

   a herald    and what is standing

   free.      show me when I will arrive at

that place     where I always will be,    and

what would I remind you of 

    as openness      threading itself closed until.

 

remember the early zeal in the way you love

     deciding quickly the weight of joy,   the

     rich of ending; angels growing pale with what

you are saving for.                when we all included

     once,  within our time

                   with or without a quality        the vast

ownership insisting:         and when you caress me

    what was-it-ever   you believed to be shaping

   grey by winged grey?  

 

       asking lanterns what our tongues are for.

 

allowing a trespass        to define the color of

   your eyes                   today.

 

all the whiles      staggering in light mass and

   intent,    to nurture �"faded soul beat- every wish

     into gratitude and you (always so near,    the

         fable intoxicating    and along my skin,

         always so near,    bidding inward, an envied

          prayer as you remove my strings.)    will

show me,    the sum of these waits,    in spit

    palm struck and the slow pull outward.

Reviews

[John Destalo]

For some reason this piece took me to baseball. I felt like that moment when a great pitcher is challenging a great hitter at a key moment. Words like "struck", "strings", "palm", "spit", "wrist", "wait" and more took me to that place where two supreme beings are challenging each other at their respective crafts.

[barton smock]

there seems a giving up, a pausing, a redaction, all at once in the moving forward. all this work is momentum, gravid.

[mikl paul]

thank you for reading, always.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Another really strong piece that conjours emotions like wafts of smoke in the air; taking shape and then dissapating before I can completely comitt them to mind. I quite like this feeling, it's sort of out of body, and your writing does it to me. You have a definite way with phrasing, which I can really relate to, and I love your word choice. You are a deliberate poet, and I like that very much.

[mikl paul]

thank you. i always considered it a craft, and when reading you can often tell the difference between those that do, and those that don't.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

You certainly have a "spoken word" style to your writing. I've never read mine before, so I write more for the "reader", though I think a good poet is able to do both, as you obviously do.

[mikl paul]

i actually don't really write anything to be read out loud, i just recently even started allowing them to be read. i used to do slam, years ago, and write very differently for the mic.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Interesting...well, I think your style just has a "beat" vibe to it. I spent some time in San Francisco some years back, and the beat poet scene was amazing there. I just get that same sense from your work; I have a hard time not reading it out loud to myself.

[mikl paul]

thank you. some of us are trying to shed the beat skin californians have. calling ourselves elegants. :)

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Okay...I'll use that moniker when I talk about your work, then..."elegants", I like that.

[mikl paul]

thank you.