Inner Supermodel

It's a song i wrote for my composition at school

A shadow is nothing but the outline of a form

no looks or blemishes

just the basics

longer as the day fades

skinny by the hour

just my inner supermodel

just my outer lie detector

 

look at her she's a happy as she can be

clean and clear she looks good on the outside

but then you look towards the ground

see her outline in the dirt

and realise it's not all that it seems

 

A shadow is nothing but the outline of a form

no looks or blemishes

just the basics

longer as the day fades

skinny by the hour

just  my inner supermodel

just my outer lie detector

 

you can't help a man who wear's his heart on his sleeve

but can you help a man who wears his shadow at his heels

stuck fast no go

don't move, don't move

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[M@]

I was a bit mislead at first; the submission was a poem but it was a song to be played. Error on my part.

I like it. The chorus (I'm assuming the 1st and 3rd "stanza") says the most, which I would think you'd want most of the message to be in a song like this. Hell, that could be a poem in itself, which is why it makes it so well done; it captures an idea in a way no one would have thought before (well, at least I haven't). I'm also a fan of the 4th "stanza": besides the fact that it's another awesome image, you also note the idea that men are also affected by these sociological underpinnings that most people would only assume women have to deal with.

Truly nice; makes me wish Writer's Cafe would try to include some sort of streaming music player for spoken word poetry and things like this.

[An owl on the moon]

Such an insightful, reflective song, taking us on a journey into ourselves and who we really are. Wonderful write!

Craig

[S.E. Conway]

i feel a connection to this piece.. and i feel that being able to find connections to readers is a very important quality...

very well done^.^ how did you do for the project?

s.e.

[Corey Lunare-]

People who are so appealing on the outside are oftentimes the dirtiest people ver. their insides, soul and heart, are so cruel and unforgiving and uncaring. Its horrible to know that beauty can host such eil but this is not true beauty to begin with. true beauty is whats inside, love and care, and all otheracts of mercy. sorry lol, neways you did a marvelous job on this peice, you show great promise!~

[DaniElle LaPointe]

Very nice. Your are good at getting the intuitive out and onto the page. Great first subbmission! Welcome to the cafe!

I thought this was good. It could be either a song or a poem. I liked how you described our beauty obsessed society!

[mim]

writing can be interpreted in every way

[Kevin Reader]

a great way of tackling the issues of beauty in our society

[Connor]

Seems different looking at the lyrics than to listening to it :)
Sing some of mine next :) you said you would.
Brilliant though :) keep writing!! please..?