Immortal Time

 

Tipping scales of immortal time,

 

intertwined this world and I.

My breath is not a guarantee,

for death I am not so shy.

 

Far beyond this life I’ll still be.

My soul lives eternally.

Twisted and bound to a mere shell,

I walk with humility.

 

I crave not the things most desire,

it’s just not a part of me.

I am simply the arms and legs,

of a soul with destiny.

 

So many adorn their bodies,

neglecting their very soul.

I will never understand this,

those things never make you whole.

 

How do you not see who you are?

Is your blind eye, purposely?

 

Your soul is craving, yet unheard!

Let it breathe and set it free!

 

Give it freedom by what you do.

Let it live its life through you!

You are here, because, it chose you.

Without it, you would be through.

 

Grasp the passion, with heart and soul.

Live your life, and let it shine.

Understand soon, life will move on

sucked into immortal time.

 

~Melody

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[J.V. Stanley]

'So many adorn their bodies,
neglecting their very soul.
I will never understand this,
those things never make you whole.'

wonderfully worded my dear and such a regular thing that is seen with people these days-paying more mind to the aesthetics rather than the gooey nougat center that is the individual and their souls. People get lost within their own shallow way of thinking and the narrowmindedness of conformity. As empty as people are and we realize that they are, sadly enough even a warning or a bludgeon to the head won't wake them up because they don't realize that it is happening to them. Hopefully this poem screams out to them and beats them until they are unconscious. Certainly had an effect upon me. Bravo! Very well penned!

[Allie]

Very beautiful and thought filled. I like a poem that makes me think.

[marytownsend]

Keeping our sights on something beyond this earthly realm is important, because our lives are a whisper of smoke...here and then gone. This poem captures that beautifully!
Very well written!!

[Loner]

Loved the last stanza ..... great write indeed .

[Kes]

"So many adorn their bodies,
neglecting their very soul.
I will never understand this,
those things never make you whole."

This is my favourite bit. :) I've never understood why people can't just live their lives instead of obsessing over the tiny details.
Keep up the hard work!
K

[Gothic Girl]

very reassuring poem. this really made my day. it's like all my stress just disappeared. :)

[The Scholar]

This is stunning! Helped brighten up my day, it did! Nice piece

[Yheela]

A very nice thought to have before bed (which is when I'm reading it). I'll take this to heart and carry it with me tomorrow.

[Junert]

Nice

[Raven Starhawk]

^^* I am unable to speak or rather write anything productive in this comment. I guess I have a dose of the duhs but...still having read this...I have to let you know I greatly anticipate your writing.

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This is really meaningful and amazing ^_^
Amazing work indeed!
100/100