I dare you to fall

A poem I wrote in the 8th grade mind you. I love this poem and will never revise it. I will always keep this as is,a simple aabb someday my desire for my skill will match my passion.

Even tempered mercury

covering your very soul

Remaining balanced

or it will consume you whole

 

Fire plays a role for

one and all around

Cook filling meals or

 burn your home to the ground

 

Words whispered in passion

 followed with tears in your eyes

Sweet words whispered

concealing dangerous lies

 

For every gift comes

a promised curse inside

Unshaken unwavering

 still standing on the flip side

 

A deck of cards

never chooses your hand

Dancers dance in the moment

 regardless of the band

 

Enchanted on coals of fire

or dancing in the freezing rain

Embracing under the moon

 to remove the shallow pain

 

Choosing carefully is safe

 falling is better without a care

Rivers, rapids, rocks and falls

 till you find the paradise there

 

I’ll see you there

can you here it call

I’ll see you there

 if you dare to fall

 

Author's Note

Never forget at the end of the day....LOVE SOMEONE.

Reviews

[Maan]

Oh beautiful! :) Each line, each word was just attracting more and more towards their meanings, towards the whole scene they create. I really enjoyed it.

"A deck of cards never chooses your hand
Dancers dance in the moment regardless of the band"

Classical lines..

[Kimberly "Melody" Carney]

Thank you so much for your review. I am so glad you like it. It is a poem I wrote a very long time ago, those I have followed its meaning over the many years, I have had many of heart break...still the journey I would take for at the end I did find my very own paradise!

[Lily Mae]

If we dare..and oh we should :) I love this.. pure and beautiful..xo

[sienikeha]

8th grade? 13,14 yrs? lovely. deep soul.

[Kimberly "Melody" Carney]

A very old soul;) I was 14. My soul has always thought as it does now, my mind has learned to keep pace.

[sienikeha]

beautiful. :)

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gorgeous as usual, melody! When people get tired, that's when they stop taking chances. whether it's tired of fear, or disappointment, or any title put on it. Some just rest...others become depressed. I love your work, dear poet :)

[Kimberly "Melody" Carney]

Thank you I wrote this when I was in 8th grade, I am 38 now. I guess this is the one I have always held to in my choices.

[Coyote Poetry]

"Sweet words whispered concealing dangerous lies
For every gift comes a promised curse inside"
I agree with the words in this poem. Take no chances. You will not know real pleasure or pain. I like the complete poem. Thank you for the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Remember Courage]

I love the cover art on your poems! It is very creative and cute. The description and emotion in this was breath taking. I loved the title a lot. It really stood out from the rest of them. This was so symbolic and narrative like you were challenging someone to fall. Very nice wording and fantastic imagery. Can't wait to read more of your work.
-Courage

[just is]

Nice job rhyming, deep and powerful message.
I enjoyed

[Kimberly "Melody" Carne..]

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